I like it - slightly ominous. Lots to unpack here, it jumps from one idea to another. However, it still evokes a similar emotion. Personally, I hope you're going to do well :).
Clearly, greatly personal. Chillingly human. Fun to read with expansive diction. It's well written, maybe a bit less descriptive, but has great emotion.
This time capsule/resolution is amazing. Reading this, I've learned some things, and have been motivated with an emotion I can only call "writing". You have a very solid definition of self and express that very well in this essay. The last paragraph is sort of ironic, as it is self-defining, but also nicely described, with many benchmarks that you will be able to see. "arouse feelings of happiness, distress, shame, regret within a writer" - Yup!
I have never heard/read a groundhog so old and salty, and a bit disheartened. I like the way you portray unwritable name groundhog, which is so much different than the very confused animal I see on TV. "Phil teaches a lesson to me"
Yes, very unfortunate that this is non-fiction. I don't know why, but I keep reading "laughter hides the slaughter". That line is very provocative. I like it.
I think it really shows a lot of last year: details that I really had to remember to understand. This is a great poem to be encapsulated in time.
This is new (as I only face a wall when I sleep) but really convincing. Deja-vu a bit here, real powerful forces of nature, and how we feel in scale to them: by yourself in the dark! I like it. Bit short, I do feel that the emotion should be long.
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