Thank you for sharing this. I learned many things about the "festival of love". This isn't my religion or practice but I'm not knocking it or you. What I liked most about this piece is, the vivid picture your words painted. Your words paint a clear picture. What I dislike most about your essay is, the number of times you used the words: celebrate, celebration, tradition, and enthusiasm or enthusiastic. For example, the celebration can be replaced by gathering, ceremony, event, fete, fest, festival, carnival, fiesta, or gala. Instead of tradition, you can use convention, custom, heritage, birthright, principles, culture, lifestyle, and so on. Other than that, keep up the great work. |