\"Writing.Com
*Magnify*
SPONSORED ITEMS
BY ONLINE AUTHORS
Printed from https://shop.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/orchidslvr2914
Review Requests: ON
48 Public Reviews Given
48 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
Is honest, encouraging, motivating and helpful with revisions.
I'm good at...
Spotting grammar and punctuation errors.
Favorite Genres
Static poems, mystery, horror, life, and etc. Pretty much anything.
Least Favorite Genres
Romance
Favorite Item Types
Poems less than 40 lines and/or number specific word poems. 6 word story for example.
Least Favorite Item Types
Long drawn-out over explained dialogue unnecessary to the picture your supposed to be painting for me with you're words.
Public Reviews
Previous ... -1- 2 ... Next
1
1
Review of Light Torches  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (3.0)
I have to say, I was a little confused about what the story was really about! Was it focusing on the "light torches," or the gigantic spiders waiting to pounce once the light went out? I took away a star for that confusion, and another for a few grammar and sentence structure issues towards the end. But honestly, it was still such an excellent story! There are so many exciting directions you could take it. I’m really looking forward to reading an updated version. Until next time, WriteOn!


Yours truly,

Booklover4025


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" Open in new Window..
2
2
Review of The curse  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
I absolutely love how you wove the story starter into your narrative! I found myself reading it twice just to make sure I wasn't imagining things. The theme of your story was fantastic! I almost had to pause my phone when it hit me that you were the transformed parrot—what a twist! The only reason I didn’t give "The Curse" a full 5 stars is because of a few grammatical hiccups, but honestly, your story really has it all. Great job, and thank you for the inspiration! Can't wait to see what you write next. WriteOn!

Warm wishes,
Booklover4025


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" Open in new Window..
3
3
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I enjoyed reading this poem. You're flow and rhyme were beautifully executed. I like how you left me wanting to know your name. Where did you get the inspiration for this poem? My favorite lines are lines 17-20 and lines 21-24. Flawless. Excellent work. I rate this 5/5 stars. Write on!

Booklover4025
4
4
Rated: E | (5.0)

Wow, what a powerful story. I really enjoyed reading about 'her fingers'. My favorite lines are Her hands; she knew they weren't just tools. Her fingers had become storytellers, slender rebels against the crushing silence. To be honest there isn't one thing I dislike about your story! Excellent work. 5/5 ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐
5
5
Review of Spooky Mission  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
"I loved how your story left me wanting more. However, I did notice a few grammatical errors and misplaced words. But overall, I enjoyed reading this short story! The way you described the street was flawless and I enjoyed the setting. I think you should consider adding more to this story. Excellent work! I'd give it 4 out of 5 stars.

Best regards,
Imogen Elliott"
6
6
Review of Snowflake  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
I absolutely love this poem. It reminded me of my own experience of trying to capture snowflakes on my tongue. It triggered a delightful and playful memory. My favorite lines are 'falling softly from the skies, landing ever so gently on his cheek'. Those lines really stood out to me. Thank you for sharing the poem and giving us the prompt and assignment. I appreciate it. Thank you, Dave.

Best regards,
Imogen Elliott


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" Open in new Window..
7
7
In affiliation with The Poet's Place  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed reading this poem dispite it's dark nature. Life isn't life without both. You need bad to have and good and vice versa. Interesting to wonder about where that kind of thinking and mindset began. My favorite lines are the entire first stanza and the last stanza. Excellent work. I look forward to reading more of your work. Thoughtful and honest.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" Open in new Window..
8
8
Review of The Right Words  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
I found this piece difficult to review, despite enjoying the way it was written. After reading it several times, I struggled to find anything to criticize.
The author's passion was evident throughout the piece, and they did an excellent job of connecting with the audience and conveying a specific emotion.
In the stanzas, I suggest replacing the words 'word' and 'feel' with synonyms or antonyms that better convey the intended message. Visually, the piece is well-structured, and the rhymes flow seamlessly. Overall, it's an inspiring piece that leaves a vivid impression. Keep up the good work!


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" Open in new Window..
9
9
Review of Serpent lies...  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, reading Serpent Lies was such a joy! 😍 I've actually read it 10 times because your writing has such a powerful emotional impact on me. 😭 I absolutely loved the way you set the stage in your first 3 lines and your metaphors were just amazing. 🔥 Keep up the great work! 👍


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" Open in new Window..
10
10
Review of Oh, Waiter!  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I really enjoy 6-word stories and I'm hoping to find more like the one you shared. 😊 I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. 📖 Writing in the horror or spooky genre is difficult for me, so your 6-word poem is inspiring. 🤩 I loved your Halloween-themed story! 🎃


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" Open in new Window..
11
11
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I can't even begin to imagine not being able to bid farewell to my loved ones. Your poem deeply resonated with me. Your words conveyed a sense of darkness or burden that you seem to be carrying, but I don't want to assume anything based solely on the pain in your words. I eagerly look forward to reading more of your powerful writing. Keep up the great work!
12
12
Rated: E | (4.0)
I love this poem. Definitely, describes lingering. My favorites are first the title 'Could I Tarry. How did you come up with that ad your title? My favorite stanza is the last. Amazement is exactly how I felt when I read this Quatern. Keep up the great work.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" Open in new Window..
13
13
Review of the Artist's View  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
Excellent poem. Your words painted a pretty picture. What I like most about this poem is how you used the colors as the words and showed them visually. I was not too fond of your punctuation error at the end. You forgot to put a period at the end of the last line. Other than that, this is an excellent descriptive piece I enjoyed reading. Well done.
14
14
Rated: E | (5.0)
What an excellent piece. I enjoyed reading this, and it flows like a river. I wonder where you found the inspiration for this one? I wouldn't say I liked the title, but other than that, I find nothing wrong with this masterpiece.
15
15
Review of THE CHAMBER  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I enjoyed reading the chamber. Your words painted a crystal clear picture—a picture of a man sentenced to death for crimes he regrets committing. I wonder if these words are from your own experience with prison or from losing someone you love to it. What I like most about your poem is the title and the flow of your words—an excellent and clever write. There is a minor grammatical error; you wrote 'savoir.' It should be savor.' Keep writing and never give up!
16
16
Review of Tiny Dancer  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thanks for sharing your writing. I love this poem. I like the words you chose, the picture your words illustrated. What I like most about this piece are the last two sentences. I like how you ended it with, the first flower of spring. The only thing I don't like about the poem is the line spacing. Other than that I love everything about this poem! Keep writing and excellent work.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" Open in new Window..
17
17
Review of The day  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
I love this poem! I like the natural flow and rhyme scheme. My favorite part is the last 4 lines. I love how you ended it. The only thing I dislike about your poem is how crowded it looks. You could just hit enter every four lines, or change the spacing of each line. Those are my only suggestions. 4 1/2 out of 5. Keep up the great work and happy writing.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" Open in new Window..
18
18
Review of Lisa  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Interesting. I felt as if I was Lisa. I understand Lisa, her frustrations, and her worries about her parents. Maybe, because, at one point in time I was Lisa. Anyway, I have no ill words about this piece. I am, however going to suggest a format change. Keep up the great work. Overall I give this a 4 out of 5 stars.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" Open in new Window..
19
19
Review of Around  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow. Powerful words, and cleverly written. My favorite lines are if these walls had faces they would scream, cry, and shout from all the past lovers The only thing I dislike is the format of the poem. Great work, keep at it.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" Open in new Window..
20
20
Rated: E | (3.5)
Thank you for sharing this. I learned many things about the "festival of love". This isn't my religion or practice but I'm not knocking it or you. What I liked most about this piece is, the vivid picture your words painted. Your words paint a clear picture. What I dislike most about your essay is, the number of times you used the words: celebrate, celebration, tradition, and enthusiasm or enthusiastic. For example, the celebration can be replaced by gathering, ceremony, event, fete, fest, festival, carnival, fiesta, or gala. Instead of tradition, you can use convention, custom, heritage, birthright, principles, culture, lifestyle, and so on. Other than that, keep up the great work.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" Open in new Window..
21
21
Review of Life and Death  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Wow. Am amazing write. Your baseball metaphor disguises the message of your words. I dislike the title but in a way it's fitting. What I like most about your poem are the last 3 stanzas. I enjoyed reading this piece. Excellent work. Keep at it.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" Open in new Window..
22
22
Review of A Sock Dilemma  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
I love that this piece is about socks! There's only 2 lines that have 8 syllables, last line of each stanzas. Overall, great piece.
23
23
Review of Journal Entry #3  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Yes, it is apart of writing. In my opinion, I would have someone other than my partner edit it. Never give up and just keep at it. The long road will definitely be rewarding in the end.
24
24
Review of Tired  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
This poem spoke very loudly to me. I could literally feel the pain, frustration, and emotions as I read each word. You did great work.
What I dislike most about your poem is, the number of times you used the words/phrase, "I'm", "tried", and I'm tried". What I like most about your poem is, the real-life feeling and rawness of your words. Keep on writing and never stop!


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" Open in new Window..
25
25
Review of Oh Mother  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This was a very powerful piece of writing. I felt the passion and emotions as I read each word. This is a very touchy subject for a lot of people, so I won't go too in-depth. I felt your pain you felt almost as I read through this poem again. You are so strong, and love your mother so very much. Keep writing it's how I get through everything. Great work.
28 Reviews • *Magnify*
Page of 2 • 25 per page   < >
Printed from https://shop.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/orchidslvr2914