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Review of The Beach  Open in new Window.
Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings Yzheng,
I live near "The Beach" so the title captures my interest in reading your short story.
I am glad to note that everything ends well after all the hassle and bustle on the way to your destination.
The story has a good flow.
I noticed in the first line of the story:
"There is no words to describe...."
Possibly you can change this to :
"There are no words to describe.... "
Suggestion only.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON !
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Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings Felicite,
The title is sad and the story is sad too but it is a fact. A sad fact indeed.
This is well-written and the message is clear that there is always a caring heart and a caring soul and everything has a reason for our individual journey called life.
You touch my heart reading this.
Perfect as it is!
WRITE ON !
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Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings Allison,
A poetry from the heart that expresses confusion and negativity.
I believe that all of us have this experience of being so low or so down but as long as we believe that there is GOD up there who loves us then all will be well.
We may ask God's help and surely it will be given. We just keep on hoping that there is really hope.
I have nothing to correct, I wish that today you will read this work again and you will shout to the whole world that you possess a brave heart and spirit because God truly loves you.
Let your thoughts keep flowing it is a very healthy release or form of healing.
I admire the creativeness.
Thank you for sharing.Write On !
God Bless You ...
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Review of Summer Happiness  Open in new Window.
Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings linfer,
A very captivating title and a very interesting story, so full of memories that lives forever.
The story has a good flow and it radiates joy to your readers. I am happy for you that you gain such wonderful experience worthy to be shared, to be remembered and to cherish.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review of O Mohonk  Open in new Window.
Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings webwitch,
WOW ! Mohonk !
I have a book about this beautiful place, and when my best friend Sandra left for United States to be with her husband for a long holiday and I let her bring the book with a promise that she will be visiting Mohonk and tell me about it.
Reading your very inspiring and inviting poem, it makes me so glad feeling that I also visited the place which I believe only a miracle can let it happen.
Thank you so much, reading line after line, I consider it as a dream come true.
Really a delight to my heart.
You have written and shared a very meaningful work making my day glorious.
GOD BLESS YOU ALWAYS..
See you again in this awesome community.
WRITE ON !
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Review of Tunnel of Life  Open in new Window.
Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings morningbird,
A poem with a dark message in the beginning as well as in the middle like a hallucination, but the sudden twist at the end, wishing and expressing hope for the better or for the best makes this poem more meaningful.
My suggestion:
"haollowed"
Please change this to hallowed
SUGGESTION ONLY.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review of A box of hearts.  Open in new Window.
Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings acookk,
Poetry from the heart and the title is very exciting, inviting that expresses sweetness.
NICE FORM OF ART.
My suggestion:
"Ever time we kiss"
Please change this to :
Every time we kiss
SUGGESTION ONLY.
Thank you for sharing "A box of hearts"
WRITE ON !
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Review of Vortex Of My Mind  Open in new Window.
Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Greetings dizzydaizy,
A dark poetry that looks like a prose to me. The title fits for the chosen words, lines that completed this poetry. Very intriguing.
Emptiness is overpowering in the wholebeing.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings dandiee,
I can imagine what will be going on in this particular wedding day and the speech that the groom will doing. AHA !
I always enjoy attending family and friends wedding day and I always listen to speeches and I think this one you are sharing is wise.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review of The Rebel  Open in new Window.
Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings Tracy,
The title is truly captivating added with a caption below the title, the more I really wanted to read this work.
YES ! This is real and hilarious ...truly a rebel...
A typical rebel child..
hahhaha !
I like your style of writing poetry with few lines..
Like a Haiku..
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON..
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Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Greetings judity,
Whew ! A really sad story about Mary. A murder victim and what makes it more sad is the husband's crime succeeded.
A heavy drama full of suspense.
Another admirable creation by judity.
Thank you for sharing your very impressive talent.
See you again in this awesome community.
WRITE ON !
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Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings wiseowl,
This is a very unique ghost story, Sad and sad in every aspect of life and death.
I admire your creativeness.
"Turn around.
Turn around !
TURN AROUND !"
Perfect three lines that concluded this work, making this a convincing ghost story.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON !
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Review of Each Day  Open in new Window.
Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings anikah,
A poem with a good flow and a good rhyme.
I admire the message that it brings and the positiveness of each written stanza.
Inspiring and meaningful.
A poem that greets each day with great expectations.
Thank you for sharing "Each Day"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Greetings Lightbringer,
True to your penname Lightbringer this article brings light all around in this awesome community.
Detailed, informative, educational and truly useful for everyone's great readership.
I am so happy to have read this.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings reeree,
The title offers a long lasting relationship. The poem expresses differently as if the relationship became sour and the deepest emotion surfaced. Sad to note when friendship turned out this way.
A prose written with all honesty.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON.
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Review of Died every nighT  Open in new Window.
Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Greetings selalanurag,
A poem with a message to someone special and it's being expressed in an un-usual way.
My suggestion:
iam afraid of loosing you
Please change this to:
i am afraid of losing you
SUGGESTION ONLY.
Thank you for sharing your work.
WRITE ON !
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Review of Always Autumn  Open in new Window.
Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings crankee,
A poem that touches my innermost soul. I have never experience this season called autumn and you described it wonderfully in your poetry as you shared wonderful, memorable moments with someone close to your heart in this particular season of the year.
So thoughtful, so full of longings, so full of love, so sad.
The presentation is great and the poem has a good flow.
Thank you for the read.
WRITE ON !
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Review of THE PRAYING HANDS  Open in new Window.
Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings manav,
I like the title, very thoughtful, very blessed.
I like the poem itself. Original and true.
My suggestion:
"expression & action
peace & of all sum
liberation & fulfillment"
Please change the sign & to word....and
expression and action
peace and all of sum
liberation and fulfillment...
SUGGESTION ONLY.
Thank you for sharing this very meaningful poem.
WRITE ON !
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Review of A Love So Perfect  Open in new Window.
Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings Tim Chiu,
The poem from the heart and it expresses purity of the soul.
The poem has a good flow and it is so lovely from the title to the end.
"And grateful sweetheart."
Perfect conclusion for "A Love So Perfect"
Thank you for the read.
WRITE ON !
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Review of Being Strong  Open in new Window.
Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Greetings noodles2012,
The title is captivating. The whole story is sad and so true that courage is there in the presence of sorrow. Touching in the real sense.
My suggestion:
"few monthes"
Please change this to : few months
Also possibly you can put two spaces in every paragraph.
SUGGESTION ONLY.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review of The Beautifuls  Open in new Window.
Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings rachelanderson,
The title captures my interest to read your work.
This expresses a message about the beautiful people.
The poem is truthful and has a good flow and observant as well as descriptive.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Greetings jenhen,
"A paradox indeed."
A real experience as in a drama in real life only this is an experience while traveling Cambodia in particular and what a queer experience.
The narrative has a good flow and well-written from the start to the end.
Not an experience to let others try because it has given a negative effect and not good for the health.
Thank you for the read.
WRITE ON !
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Review of Special Quiz  Open in new Window.
Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings youngpoet,
Quiz is a mind refresher and it activates the memory power too. The quiz is interesting , however I wish there were more questions being asked, not just two questions. SUGGESTION ONLY.
Thank you for the opportunity for me to answer this quiz.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Night Cover  Open in new Window.
Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings kinderqueen,
The free-verse poetry that states or expresses an unpleasant experience. Much busy days, busy nights and the negative outcome.
Sad and deeply emotional.
Thank you for sharing your talent through "Night Cover"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings drawerwriter,
I was intrigued reading the caption below the poetry as in asking, "what is this all about, huh ! "
As I read between the lines of your poem, the message was fully understood.
Yes, this is really a "Liquidity of Memory"
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON !
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