Okay ms dickenson ill help you out,,,All the tea pieces for horror set out nicely.teh order and emily dickensonion puntilliousnes made me groan a,,,little, weactually a lottle it reaaly could just be me as a guy who uses voice only, to me it seem rather effusive and kind of over done, dont be mad rememberber im rustic and an evangelist, none the less ifyou want to get good enough at this, your desscrition of stuff is very well done but seeemed to lack teh pluck of grishom in what was it " the recknoning " you maigt hthiak oh patricks goig to be mean Because of my devil may care critiiquof his automatic whatever that was, nope i calls en as i sees em,only my opinion b the details were drippin in to mauch into what was going down in the plot..
.i must say it was working well or the abuctees clothes horse promenade but, quite frankly i thought he was a rich girl s personal chaufeaur for the longest time.... Its been quite a while since Ive studied Eamily dickenson, if you must knowadn i willget back the critique, wich may bea record for the longest msot exhahstve one in that loan kite tail of them with breezy snippet of some real stuff to help..smeare good some hallmark well wishing, but anyway, do youa know what crazy female hiuan bieng did in her one life,,,,yes did you would escape aptricks evangleizng maws of truth daughter mine, at her preatigeus school, wel an evanglesit under the spirt of the second grat awakening preached hard and well, there is simply nothing like this to do sister, its like niagra falls of truth, falling from ones mouth adn by Jesus appwer sell binding people,,, if you prove to make holy chioces, as of now yourjust atlented overly brace girl, but practicce chirpoing out to jesus, this born again tiag takes info, and time, but ican tell your read woamn at the well, godod short breezy critique thank you, okay uh on man ueas so all teh firls in her school stand uo to accpept.. theyweremoved todo so , but seh wasnt so she just well sat...yep he girfreieds implored her mightily, but as a fanof her stuff and her life you know how she was, dont you dare be like her Amythet,,,sadly she lost there coamany as they wern now newly born again, intrianed they sort of abandoned he, but iam trianed i will not abandon you but dont ever tiak of me as anything but a warrior for Jesus, ..the fallen worls venue of what menadn weoamn are .only..,,decidely shallow. amywhoo back to the longest critiquein the world
um okay, uh the thing about hi abieing mad at her dad foe his hackin incidnet in Dads company a lil, well overboard but kinda works , casue hes a well dressed madman, with no consicinece but, maybe needs more fleshing out,,,,his bluntness in him takingher life very well done..,,i dont ocndone murder enn in fociton as an evalgesit but it was teh realest thiang in th horror story... okay her kllling him is alittel, hurray a hallmark ending .Be more creative.um.
hmm.my brains drooping dear, tome to close i givey ou an A-
but you really have no idea how surpiesed iwas as when i saw how long it was, iknda see read it, but you deserve that grade, your a desriotion genius, but be more selective too much, read " the reckonong and read "Lazarus', pay note to Jesus yeallinga at mary ,,ima going to yell at you, maybe? in time,carefully, alittle cause jesus loves you,dont be mad
in claisig its a reala,,good work, pretty good shorrt story ,
now listen, be nice be my frieind , wihle your in this sight, uh tell other folks "yeah yeah, hes a good guy, hes funny an ridiculaous causue he gets "bored" an someitimes has no filtter,hes not boring Paostork but his stuff is scr[iturally Thoughgt out,somewhat literary,yes it is if peopl eare bored they leave.. a fact,, (dont get mad at typohes, lotta work) talk to others in site .to read his stuff, simpy wants all members go to heaven,,a simle man, how? by showomg his Personal jesus,
hes real, or trys to be,, find your personal jesus,,, so., dont be scared. he sinceres,Amyyths,(oh dear sorry wrong spelling..please new freind,uj just speak to weoman,, help me, sister..patrick |
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