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Review of Disillusionment  Open in new Window.
Review by Pat Roison Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
This was a good poem. It's true how "reality" differs from one person to the next, and how our perceptions color it.

It is a shame that poetry is not my style of choice or I could provide more solid feedback.

In my mind it was a good poem with a clear message.

Keep reading and keep writing.
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Review of The Choice  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This was an interesting story. The dilemma of using the water on Abigail, the woman he needs, or on Roger for the potential contributions to mankind.

The only concern I have (please bear in mind that I am not strong grammatically) is that the story seems to end abruptly. Another point I feel is that Roger's background felt out of place at first. Though it did show how important Abigail is to him I just can not shake that it feels as though it could come earlier.

I enjoyed your story and look forward to reading more. I did not mention anything grammatical because as I mentioned before it is not a strong point for me.

Keep reading and keep writing!
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