I can feel that you have poured your heart on to this poem. Very well written in free verse. I would suggest trying to be more descriptive and show us the feeling rather than just telling it. Your poem exudes a lot of potential and you are already on the right track. Write more and give out more! Good Luck!
Like everyone who are faced with loneliness and pain your poem shouts with the simplicity and the solitude of the one being left out with no other choice but to go through with life. Continue writing and use what you feel, what you have. That's the tool of a poet, maximize it.
Your poem speaks out your style. I would suggest more of descriptive words that brings the reader up and into to your world. You have it with you and i can sense that you will be writing more. Write more and inspire many! Silence still is where you put all your words inside you but let it shout in some other outlet like this poem.
You already have something going on here. The Topic is broad and i know you tried letting the words flow through to describe the moment Every one has some "monster" within and it is how we let them in or control us but either way it's a battle we come face to face every day. Write more!
I don't have any grandchildren yet but this poem is a feel good read. Simple, honest and light. I can't imagine myself holding and talking to my grandchildren someday. They say that grandchildren are God's gift to Grandparents at some point they serve as second chance to let the fill up the love we missed giving to our children.
Great read,Thanking God in the morning should always be the first thing in mind. EAch morning is a gift and a blessing, another hope and chance to glorify the Lord once again. Continue inspiring people and write more. God bless my friend.
Just by reading your Title it already catched my attention. To go on alone means mustering all your strength and finding courage within. It is in hope that there will be followers. Probably a loved one or a friend that you anticipate would be travelling along and you are very much willing to take the time to wait. Your poem as i read it has that substance but it can be better. Write more my friend you already have it in you!!!1
I always find poems and articles of faith and of God encouraging and motivating. The more we write about our path and our realization a soul out there actually finds his plight way back to the almighty. Thanks for sharing your poem. Please write more. Good Read!
Simple and Clear. Your poem is an expression of reality on how we can be so vulnerable and affected yet feel no strength nor the courage to utter the right words. As they say words when said could not be taken back but words that was not spoken is a chance lost forever. Good read! Write more!
Topics about renewed faith and returning to faith have always interest me. The mere fact that most of us in due time runs out of energy and have to look back where we did really have gone. Lost and alone not all of us would find the path way back and many seem to get lost and die unhappy. Poem and articles likes this makes life an easy turning point. Good Read!
Well, this article surely remind me not to text or read a text while driving. Kidding aside, your heartfelt article was really moving. Surely there are times when we are too consumed about our feelings we tend to forget everything. Especially when it is a loved one everything shuts down and nothing seem to be more important.Great read. Please write more
You poem is funny. Haven't read a funny poem for such a long time. It is simple and started out like it is serious and ended up in humiliatingly humurous manner. Well i guess it do happens sometimes and when it did you wouldn's surely forget. Thanks for sharing this. Write on!!!
Sometimes when you look at it pets do provide a better kind of love than human do because it is unconditional. Whether you are down and or happy they will stick with you and comfort. They will always be there for you. This poem will make her/him immortal in the hearts of men, that in a given time an unconditional lover shared your life. Write on!
Your words pierces to the heart of the reader. I find your poem excruciatingly painful and true as there are real people now that might feel the same thing or in the same predicament. You succeeded in letting the sorrow flow from your pen to the hearts of the reader. Write on!
Short and witty. I agree with you that life is also a dance. One should take careful steps but yet it should be in harmony with beauty. Go with the flow but never forget yourself. Continue writing you have it already going. Inspire millions and publish your work. Good Luck!
Your poem is moving. But I think it needs more body that can envelop the whole idea. I was taken away but the first few stanzas but it seem to die down on the last few. You have something going and this is really a great start. Continue writing and I wish you all the best!
Your article reminded me of my childhood days when my mon use to bring me to the Carnival. It is suppose to be fun but the giant clowns and displays left me sleepless at night. You succeeded on creating a thrill ride with the character that any person can relate. Good work Tom! Do write more.
i don't really know if this is really you or you are casting another character. Anyway i have always been touched and amazed when writers put in stories in the first point of view. When its personal and emotional, a sense of realization and relief. The feeling so intense that the good news needs to be shared. I hope you really have found your peache with God.
You can really say it is a tragedy. Your words came out and touches the readers. Many can relate on how life can pass by us and not knowing what we have done. When we are too consumed by the "good stuff," and forget what is most important - relationships. At the end ther is retribution. Maybe not everyone get or even deserve second chances but we all have the same fair time to live the life based on our free will. Very well written. Eye opener.
When I first saw the title I just thought it was a good read for drivers. And it came out to be inspirational and an analogy of our life on the road. Life is a journey as i have always thought, and keeping your tires in good condition same as your relationship with God plays a vital role if you want to have a smooth travel on the road. Keep it up my friend!
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