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Review of My story  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
Dennis,
You need a comma(,) after June. "kissing her new boyfriend" is better. "Has she ever loved me since she broke up with me so easily? Met me saying words like". "but I understood that I got carried away with faking my illness" is unclear. "that nothing would ever get any" could be changed to would not get any". "Convinced that I really wanted to do it" made me "happy imagining her crying...." "What would she be" feeling. "Will she realize how important she was to me?"
These are the major grammatical errors I find with your piece. You can do this!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good! It was well written and anger diffused at the right time.
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Review of I always cared  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
On the fifth line up from the bottom you need to put in an apostrophe "Ill" needs to be I'll.
Very powerful!
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Review of Smile, please!  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Very insightful and powerful writing! I will probably need to read it again to get it all. But that's fine! Very well written.
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Review of Take Hold  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Very Inspirational!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Well written!
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Review of True Sentience  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Interesting story. Creative way to look at sentience. I like the story. It's well written.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wonderfully written!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Insightful and on target. Well written!I
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Review of The Library Lady  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wonderful story!
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Review of Bugs in Amber  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Good story CJ. Very well told from both perspectives.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wonderful Story. My husband even smiled. Great writing!!
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Review of Panic  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
re-find is the only thing I found. Very emotional. I'll remember if I encounter a heart attack. Well written. Thanks for writing.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Very uplifting! Well written!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Well constructed! There is a problem with some of your punctuation that should be at the end of the sentence, but isn't. Quotes should be in " " (quotation marks). Your phrases need to be in quotation marks as well.I think if you fix those points, you will have an easier to read article. I like what you have to say and how you said it.
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Review of Back to Dust  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Well written and graphic! It's a shame he died.
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Review of Sheets  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I used to feel that way, but now that I've thrown off the "sheets" I am able to breathe again and experience life in a new way. Good Writing!
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Review of Number 11  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
If I have my information correct, the "ball" in ice hockey is called a "puck". Near the end of the 19th paragraph, than needs to be then. Using than, you are comparing. Other than that, it was well written and the career was well documented. Good writing!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Interesting way to upset a ghost!
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Review of Christmas Trivia  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good test!!
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Review of Happy Plants  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Very organized and well constructed. Now I have to go get a couple of plants for my apartment.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Very well told. I noticed a couple of places there was a word missing.
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Review of Alone  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Very well written!
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Review of Do you recall?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Well written!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I went through that! The dog died, then I got a wonderful husband. My husband asks if I am writing something everyday! He is so good to me! Wonderfully written!
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