This poem brought me to tears as I remembered my sweet mother's death - she who had held the hand of my father as he passed on. The phrase "And I must say adieu" really brings you back to the first stanza each time reminding the reader that it is time to say goodbye. This peice has wonderful imagery and heart-rending emotional quality. The only suggestion I have would be to possibly place the first stanza closer to the end. It is not a better way to write it - mearly an alternative. The first stanza shocks the reader into the death scene from the beginning. If this is the intent, then it is perfect. If placed later, it might have a more emotional inmpact as the reader will realize that this isn't just a love poem, but also a death scene remembrance. Keep writing and keep giving us that emotional imagery!
I am recently engaged and enjoyed this poem that expresses many things that I feel for my love, Chris. I like how you continue to use the word 'always' at the end of the stanza. It seems to bring the whole peice together. There are some places when the rhyming seems a bit awkward, but all in all, it has a nice cadence.
This poem is a good reminder to remember those who have died, because someone else was trying to make a point. It is a message to those who use violence that violence doesn't help thier cause at all.
On the technical aspect, I enjoyed the way you used short phrase that broke into the sentences. It shows that there is an underlying passion in your words.
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