The title and the description of the story captured me from the start simply because I wanted to see a new perspective. I love how you go straight into the story because it captured my interest right away. And also the metaphors and descriptions kept my interest throughout. However, I can't tell if your spelling and grammatical mistakes were intentional or not, some may like it, I liked the mistakes, and some may not, a part of me did not like it at first. However, the order of the story and descriptions were very captivating.
One of the many great metaphors in writing is the comparison of the heart to an object, in my opinion. By comparing the heart to a door, the reader not only visualizes the heart as a doorway, but the reader feels their heart opening and closing. Using words such as "barge in" affects the reader's perception about their relationship, in this case my relationship. I can feel these words because I can relate to them. And, because the Poem is short and easy to read, I can feel the words even more, as if I were to feel a groove within a song.
The three lines,"Leave me never... For now my Heart's door has...Closed once again" was my favorite line and hit me right through the heart. This is the best poem I have ever read in a while and I shall keep this close to my heart.
There is so much to like about this short piece, I feel as if there is a certain "glow" about it that makes it so special.
Thank you for making this poem, keep writing because it motivates me to write as well.
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