Hello! I am with the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" . I came across your poem while looking through the auto-reward items list. The title a description grabbed my curiosity because unfortunately I can relate to dealing with those icky little critters.
I normally suggest adding a picture to go with the title and description of an item, but I can't say everyone wants to see a picture of a cockroach on the ceiling. So, I'm going to leave that one alone in this situation. (Me-with shivers going down my spine)
I can't put my finger on it, but the last line seems a bit odd to me. It leaves questions. We beat on what? The bug on the ceiling? (That would make sense) We ignore it and just beat on with life? Maybe, you purposely left it open to interpretation. These are just my crazy thoughts about it. My idea is more like, praying it doesn't fall. LOL I didn't notice any grammar, punctuation or spelling issues.
Overall, it does make sense. This is one of those topics that doesn't need any extra explanations or many words. Great job! It will be interesting to see more of your work in the future.
Hello! I was happy to see more of your work in the auto-reward items list. So, here I am again to offer another review. I do hope it helps. I am associated with the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" .
I always enjoy reading and reviewing Christian literature. Again, I do believe pictures help add to the appeal of an item to help draw the attention of potential readers. I do like the title and description too. Perhaps you could find a free picture online. Maybe a picture of someone in a field praising God with their hands lifted towards the sun or a man kneeling at the cross would be an idea for a picture you might add.
This poem has the feel of a grand speech from a podium among important people to me, especially if read like the Gettysburg address by Abe Lincoln. It sounds diplomatic. I read through it several times so I could get the correct vibe. I hope that I did. I sense beautiful and sophisticated words expressing the hope and love we have in Christ from God above. I did not notice any grammatical, punctuational or spelling errors. I can't think of anything else that could improve your beautiful poem.
Overall, I believe this is very nicely written from a heart of praise towards Almighty God. Awesome job! I look forward to reading more of your work again.
Hello! I found your poem while browsing the auto-reward items list. I am always happy to see Christ-centered content and that is what drew my attention to your item here. I am associated with the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" . I am no professional reviewer, but I do hope my opinions in this review helps you out.
The title and description definitely had a big impact towards drawing my attention to read this poem. However, I do believe adding a picture works well with the title and description to help pull in a potential reader's interest. Perhaps you can find some free clipart or portrait of heaven, pearly gates, or a heart with a cross to add to your item.
The rhythm is as such that I could picture a preacher behind a pulpit, really getting into his sermon, using these words as they are written here, especially an old tent revival preacher. I did not notice any spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors.
Overall, I believe the poem presents a great message and delivers a good short sermon by itself. I look forward to reading more of your work. Awesome job!
Hello! I was browsing the list of auto-reward items when I noticed your story. I am a reviewer associated with the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" . However, I am not a professional reviewer, but I do hope my review helps you out.
The description needs a correction. "Short term loan of ones body.": "one's body" is how it should be written to show proper possession. The title and description combined is what caught my attention to read your item. If you could find some humorous clip art online of a cartoonish looking woman with a shocked expression, I think it would catch more attention. God knows we all could use an extra good laugh these days.
You may want to change the rating. I don't know that I would consider this item good for children to read. I get a little confused on the ratings too sometimes. I find this helpful in determining what the item's rating should be. "Content Rating System (CRS)"
I have noticed a few areas that need some minor corrections.
1. Oh man, a chilling realization that something was really wrong.
A sentence should be a complete thought, phrase or idea. Maybe you could add a few words to complete it such as, "a chilling realization that something was really wrong suddenly came over me". I believe realization is the subject here in the sentence. The sentence just sounds or feels off to me somehow.
2. There's a man downstairs, Hopping off the bowl not knowing how to answer.
You might want to do something with this sentence too. I would suggest turning it into two separate sentences and rewording the second sentence. (There's a man downstairs. Hopping of the bowl, I did not know how to answer.)
3. Then calmly he spoke,
“Humm, I see... Don't worry whoever you are, your experience will be over soon.” Then he calmly went back down the stairs inviting me to follow.
I would put "Then calmly he spoke," in the same paragraph and the words he spoke.
4. Her voice was unfamiliar to me. I followed him into the brightly lit and open kitchen below as he Plainly and UN-apologetically said,
"Relax, you're safe here, Julie, the person who's body you're in, must have needed your body for today." So you can relax. You’ll be back in yours soon.”
I would put these two paragraphs together. Who's should be spelled whose. You need a comma after so in "So, you can relax.".
5. A week later I received notice from my bank that I'd received twenty-seven thousand dollars from an anonymous source An exact amount able to cover all my current debts with interest.
This sentence kind of runs together. I would add a couple of commas. An should not be capitalized also. I would make it look as follows:
A week later, I received notice from my bank that I'd received twenty-seven thousand dollars from an anonymous source, an exact amount able to cover all my current debts with interest.
My overall impression is that I think this story would be improved upon by extending it beyond the 1,000 words. I think I would possibly loan my body out if all my debts were anonymously paid. LOL It's a different kind of story. I think you presented it well. It just needs some minor touch ups is all. I look forward to reading more of your work.
There may be other possible improvements, but the one's listed above are the ones I noticed. If you don't like any of these suggestions, feel free to ignore them. I do hope you find my opinion helpful.
Hello! I found your poem while looking through the list of auto-reward items. I am a WDC Superpower reviewer with the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" . I hope this review helps you even though I am not a professional reviewer.
I was drawn to read your story by the title and description. However, I do believe adding a photo to your item adds to the appeal to assist in drawing the attention of more potential readers. Perhaps you could find some free clip art online of a dog fitting Boots' description or take a picture of a real random dog in front of a random house to represent him. It did take me a few stanzas to realize the poem was about a dog and not an old man on a front porch. This is where a picture would help.
I noticed one thing that appears to be an error. It is in the third stanza. "I'd grin to himself, as that cute little pup,". I would think you meant to say, "I'd grin to myself instead of himself"? I saw no other spelling, grammar or punctuation errors.
I think you could easily turn this into a young children's book if you desired to do so. The story seems to flow really well, and the rhyme adds an element of fun to your story. I thought it was very pleasing to the ears when read out loud. The other dog chasing the squirrel added a bit of comedy to the story also.
My overall impression is that I loved it. It was a joy to read. You did a great job presenting this story in the form of a poem. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Hello! I was browsing the auto-rewards items when I came across your poetry here. I am associated with "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" and will be giving you my opinion of your work. Of course, I am not a professional, but I do hope it helps.
When I first saw the title and description, I thought, "How can there be a funeral if it was the last human on Earth?" My curiosity peaked, so naturally I just had to read it. I do always suggest adding a photo to also help draw potential readers in. Perhaps you could find some free graphics online of a grave to add to your item.
No spelling, grammar or punctuation errors appeared to me. All of that looks good. The rhyme is well done. The rhythm has a nice smooth sound to it when read out loud.
The message I received from this is how we humans return to the Earth once we die and how our bodies are supposed to be in harmony with nature. It is a poem of mourning over what once was. Where is hope? We are part of the earth and that's all we will be. I could also see this being doubled as a possible romance poem in a way. Much love for the Earth is expressed here as well. This is obviously a personal view of life and death. Someone of another religion may express this differently, especially those that express belief in life after death. However, this is still beautifully worded, and the emotions are expressed well. This is a nice piece of individual, artistic expression. Nicely done.
Overall, it is easy to read, understand and relate with. I will look forward to reading more of your work in the future.
Hello! I came across your writing while searching for auto-reward items. I am associated with "Space Blog" and "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" . Of course, I am only giving you my opinion as I am not a professional reviewer, but I do hope it helps.
What caught my attention to read your story was your title and description. Adding a photo to your item would definitely help draw attention to it. Perhaps you could find a free graphic online of a laughing groundhog or just a general picture of a groundhog or log and use that.
I did not notice many errors, but I have the following suggestions.
1. This should only be one sentence and not two. The first question mark I highlighted in red is not needed.
"Don't all of you realize that I never wanted this acclaim?, nor all this attention?"
2. This entire paragraph is a quote, and I did not see any end quotes (Again highlighted in red.), but you do have the beginning quotes.
“Look, let's face it. You people come here year after year and want to know if I or my ancestors have seen their shadow. Then they will go home and prepare for either more cold or an early Spring. Let's face it, who is the idiot here? I mean, when will you get your head out of you know where and look at life for what it is? I can't tell you any more about weather then your own damn weathermen, let alone what the future will hold. What is it about you people who look for some stupid answer to things rather then what is all around you? You people can't even agree on who is your maker, let alone what the future holds. Year after year, I have to go through all this dumb celebration and be humiliated!"
3. You are missing an apostrophe here. I also put it in red so you can see to what I am referring.
"Groundhog's day"
These are the small details that stood out to me as I carefully read your story.
I liked the fact that you point out how foolish it is to look for groundhogs to predict the weather and the future. I do believe the creator is the ultimate one we should ask if we want to know anything. Why do we try to go to other sources anyway as human beings?
Overall, I really enjoyed your piece. It's a fun and humorous way to present a profound truth. Great job writing this story! I look forward to reading more of your work in the future!
Hello! I ran across your item up for review in the community auto-rewards items. I am a "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" reviewer.
The title and description were enough to catch my attention. However, I think a photo would add to this item's appeal. It may also help draw in other potential readers and reviewers.
Wow! You want to turn reality into a game? Hmmm! That could be fun. However, there are people who seem to think we already live in a simulation. LOL I think some people already have a hard time determining reality from fiction. I honestly would not be surprised to see this sometime in the near future though. There is an app for just about anything these days.
I don't see much in the way of grammar spelling and punctuation. The only thing that stood out to me was these two sentences in the sixth paragraph. "Fans built the best games, always. No community, no Game Models." By "No community, no game models", do you mean there are none? Do the games that the fans built have no community or game models? Who has none? Maybe turn the sentences into one sentence combined, but I think it needs a little more clarity.
I did have a little bit of a hard time getting into it at first. It has more of a lecture or essay kind of feel at the beginning. I think it started getting more interesting to me at the presentation. I'm not sure what to suggest for improving it.
I do think this provides an example of how technology and AI can take over our lives in reality if we aren't careful. Overall, I think it is a great idea for a story. I think it has a few small kinks that need to be worked out such as the rough beginning. I think you've done a great job expressing the desired message in general. I will look forward to reading and reviewing more of your work in the future.
Hello! I wanted to visit your portfolio to wish you a Very Happy Account Anniversary along with a review. I am also associated with "Anniversary Reviews ~ Summer Break" and "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" , but of course I am no professional reviewer so take the parts you like and ignore the parts you don't.
I definitely can see the humor in your story, and it is sure to bring a smile to the face of every reader and possibly a chuckle too.
Adding a photo to your item helps draw the attention of a potential reader. Maybe, you could get a guy to model so you can take one or find a free clip art online to add.
While it is a bit comical, I feel like some information is missing. How did the words get written on Jack's face without him knowing it? It appears to be a result of a prank, but is there more to the story?
I did not notice any spelling, grammar or punctuation errors. I don't see anything else immediately that would improve your item except for maybe adding a little bit of a background story.
Overall, it is a fun little, short story, although Jack may have a different opinion. lol I enjoyed reading it and visiting your port. I always enjoy reading your work. Awesome work! I will look forward to reading more in the future.
Hello, I enjoyed reading your story item today. I am associated with "Space Blog" and "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" . I wanted to give you a review because I really like your story.
It is so sad that any group of people were ever treated in such a fashion as the Jews were during the holocaust. Unfortunately, it happens all too often in our world.
While your picture for the item is appropriate and helps draw in your potential reader's attention, it was the title and description that grabbed my attention. I was looking through the cultural genre when I came across your item. Who doesn't like a story of a chance discovery leading to a first-hand connection to history, even if it happens to be the darker side of it?
Your story captivated me from start to finish. You started out with the experience of buying something from an auction and the anticipation and emotion associated with it. It wasn't just the experience of the purchase but walking your reader through the discovery and reaction to it. I appreciated the historical facts shared here too. I felt like I was a part of the story as I was watching it unfold. I could feel the passion of why WWII was necessary. I could relate while hearing about the photographs and the stories of the people in them. The story feels complete and does not leave your reader hanging.
I agree that the hideout story near the church was the one that stood out to me too even though I don't know all the details. These details were enough. I don't think I really want to hear any more.
I did not notice any spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors. I can't think of anything that would improve this writing. I feel like it is complete just as it is.
I hope this review helps. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Awesome work! Keep it up!
I am reviewing your item because you posted before me in "I Write in 2025" . I am also part of the Superpower Review group.
I love your title. It's an attention grabber by itself. The cover picture helps add a mysterious feel to your story. I could easily have my interest pulled in by it. My interest was captured by the title and cover photo and was kept to the end of the story. You kept me wanting to know more. It is also very believable and well presented. I don't see any grammatical, punctuation, or spelling errors jumping out at me. I am not really seeing anything that needs improvement. It's a very fun and interesting story. I enjoyed reading it very much. I always look forward to reading more of your work. Awesome story!
Hello! You posted before me in "I Write 2025". So, I'm here to give you, my opinion. Please, don't take it too personally.
While this is a beautiful and meaningful prayer (I would never critique or take away from that), I don't feel the poetry vibe from this. I say this because it was written for a poetry contest.
FYI: I felt inspired to write one too by the way.
I don't see any spelling, grammar or punctuation errors that stand out to me. I did notice in the instructions to the contest you entered that it wants you to include the type of poem your item is in the description. I did not notice this in your item. Well, maybe you did in calling it prose. I'll leave all that to the judges to decide, but you might just double check to make sure. Those contest rules can be tricky. I think it's a pretty cover photo and lovely title.
Overall, I enjoyed reading your prayer. Thanks for sharing.
Hello! I am reviewing your story today because you posted before I did in "I Write in 2025" . I am associated with other review groups as well.
I always like to have pictures added to my static items because they add to the reader's appeal and help draw the potential reader's attention. I did not notice any spelling, grammatical or punctuation errors. The story is quick and to the point, yet easy to relate to.
I enjoyed reading your story. Great job! I look forward to reading more of your work.
Hello! I am associated with more than one review group, but am here today because of a prompt for "Space Blog" and there is a review raid happening with "SuperPower Reviewers Choice Raid"
I am not seeing any spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors that are jumping out at me. You could add a picture to help draw potential readers in. Maybe a picture of a drawn machine plan or of medical staff performing an implantation of the device. Even the medical symbol on ambulances would work. The title and description are good.
This device sounds like quite the medical and scientific breakthrough. It is written in a way that this fictional story is very realistic and believable. Great job on that! That isn't an easy task for some of us writers.
Overall, I enjoyed reading your story and look forward to reading more of your writing in the future.
Hello! I am associated with more than one review group, but am here today because of a prompt for "Space Blog" and there is a review raid happening with "SuperPower Reviewers Choice Raid"
I did not notice any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. I always think adding a picture to an item helps draw the attention of a potential reader, and your title and description are good for this as well. Maybe, you could add a picture of a calendar with a Monday circled on it or something to that effect. I think a lot of readers can identify with this poem as a lot of them feel exactly this way about Mondays. Sometimes it's very hard to get out of bed when you are anticipating a chaotic day such as Monday and all the things that come with it. The item has some negativity but also points out some positive ideas as well.
Overall, I think this poem is put together well and expressed well. Great job! I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.
Hello! I am associated with more than one review group but am here today because of a prompt for "Space Blog" and there is a review raid happening with "SuperPower Reviewers Choice Raid" .
I did not notice any spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors. This item has a pleasing rhythm to the ears when read out loud. It is a sad occasion. The title, description, and picture is great for drawing the attention of a potential reader. You get what you expect. They say that releasing ballons into the air is bad for the environment though. I can feel the emotions of this item as I read it.
It is a solid piece of writing. Great Job! I look forward to reading more in the future. Thanks for sharing it.
Hello! I am associated with more than one review group, but am here today because of a prompt for "Space Blog" and there is a review raid happening with "SuperPower Reviewers Choice Raid" .
I did not notice any grammar, spelling or punctuation errors. I think the title, description and picture is just right to draw attention to your writing from a potential reader. The rhythm and rhyme are pleasing to the ears when read out loud. The message is conveyed clearly and accurately. Although, Elon Musk is trying to get us to live on Maes from what I've heard, but I'd much rather stay here and take care of the planet we are on.
Hello! I am here as an answer to a prompt from "Space Blog" and am associated with more than one review group.
The only suggestions I have would be to add a comma after "Dear journal" and to maybe add a picture to help draw in potential readers to your item. Everything else seems good to me.
Personally, I am not sure what to believe about other life forms on other planets. I don't doubt there might be some interesting critters out there in the universe, but only God knows where they are truly from and the entire truth about extraterrestrial beings.
Overall, I find this to be a thought provoking read. Great job! I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.
Hi! I am associated with several different review groups. However, I am here to review your item today as a prompt for "Space Blog" .
I am not noticing any spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors. I love the sense of humor portrayed in your writing. It is something considered mundane yet presented in a fun way.
Overall, I enjoyed reading this. Great job! I look forward to reading more of your writing in the future.
Hello! I am associated with more than one review group. However, I am reviewing your item today because it was used as a prompt in "Space Blog" .
I did notice a couple of things that may use some improvement.
1 He woke with a start he looked around frantically.
I feel like this could be two separate sentences. (He woke with a start! He looked around frantically.)
2 He tried to remember his name but it was not there.
This sentence could use a comma. (He tried to remember his name, but it was not there.)
3 We are safe for now. but I can not maintain
Can not should be one word. (cannot)
4 "the Trik'ods are also known as
The T in the should be capitalized as it is the beginning of a quote. ("The Trik'ods are also known as)
5 The Draem Eaters.
Dream is misspelled and the end quotes are missing. (The Dream Eaters.")
I hope this is a help to you as I am also just another writer on WDC. Overall, it has the potential to become an even larger fascinating story. It is an interesting read. Thanks for sharing. Great job! I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.
Hello, I am affiliated with more than one review group. However, I am here to answer the prompt in "Space Blog" .
I didn't notice any spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors. There is a lot of emotion and meaning packed into this 55-word story. It's a sad story with a sad ending. It is short, bittersweet and to the point. I have no suggestions for improvement. The picture and the title give all the information needed to bring in a potential reader. It would make an interesting beginning of a novel.
Great job! I look forward to reading more of your work in the future,
Hello! I am associated with more than one review group. I am here because of the prompt in Space Blog.
I didn't notice any spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors. I wonder if perhaps adding a picture of a to do/check list would help draw a potential reader's attention to your poem. Although the title is something we can all relate to. We all have errands to complete. I think laundry and dishes are the tasks that never end, but that's beside the point. It is quite annoying when people add to your to-do list especially when it's already overwhelming you or it is almost done. The frustration is well expressed in this poem.
Overall, a poem that expresses the frustration shared by many other people as well. Great job! I will look forward to reading more of your work in the future.
Hello! I am affiliated with more than one review group. However, I am brought here today as a prompt from "Space Blog" .
As I read through this fake news article, I couldn't help but laugh to myself. It is quite creative. I have to admit, this is the first time I've ever heard of assisted technicide. Poor fax machine, so under-appreciated. What a fun read even with the sad ending!
I did not notice any spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors. The story is written in such a way that someone could easily mistake it for truth if it wasn't described as fictitious.
Overall, I enjoyed reading your news article. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Great job!
Hello! I am affiliated with more than one review group, and it was the Space Blog prompt that brought me here today.
I didn't notice any spelling, grammar or punctuation errors. I also double checked with Grammarly. When reading the poem out loud, the rhyme and rhythm are pleasing to the ears.
First the poem points out how God is everywhere and in everything. Then it points out that he is in other people too. These other people sometimes need you to show them the God in you.
Overall, I really enjoyed reading the poem. Great Job! I look forward to reading more of your work.
Hello! I am associated with more than one review group. However, I am reviewing your item now because you posted before me in "I Write in 2025" .
I didn't notice any spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors jumping out at me and bopping me on the nose. So, that's a good thing. :)
I read the poem out loud. Mostly, it flows really well and is pleasing to the ears. I have to admit that the ending caught me a bit off guard. It's not what I would have expected. It is a quirky and funny little poem. You might consider entering it in "The Humorous Poetry Contest" also. Of course, that's completely up to you.
Overall, I enjoyed reading your poem and look forward to reading more of your work iin the future. Thanks for sharing it. Great writing!
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