Pocohontas73's (pocohontas73) Reviews

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#3205121

Review of Whither Gods, Distracted?

Review by Pocohontas73

Rated: E

| (4.5)

I really enjoyed your poem. I like the way you combined Greek mythology with something as modern as riding the bus, it was unexpected. I definitely felt the longing and disappointment of a missed opportunity. I also could relate to the way that we all sometimes are able to envision a whole life with a person that we've only gotten a quick glimpse of. Thanks and keep up the good work.

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#2536084

Review of should i keep writing

Review by Pocohontas73

Rated: E

| (4.0)

I look forward to reading more. In spite of some typos, unclear grammar, and unnecessary changes in verb tense, the story and the characters have really sucked me in. You definately have the talent, you just need a good dictionary and a book called "Elements of Style" to clean up your writing.

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#2513005

Review of Apple Blossom Lane

Review by Pocohontas73

Rated: 18+

| (4.0)

Interesting beginning. I'm curious to see what happens with the woman in the wheelchair. Only a couple of little typos.

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#2506495

Review of The Black Prada

Review by Pocohontas73

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Love it! Love it! Love it! I was a little confused at first as to where the story was headed. You could have left out the stuff about your parents because they were sort of irrelevant to the humor and the jist of the piece. Also, mentioning them confused me about your age when you discussed having facial hair. However, that was no big deal because it was still hilarious. Plus, having lived in Manhattan and shopped at Saks, I can totally relate. Keep up the good work!

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#2354120

Review of Midnight Whispers

Review by Pocohontas73

Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Wow. That was totally unexpected. I really liked the imagery used to describe her emotions, such as "realisation poured into my mind like a damn breaking . . .". The twist at the end was very original.

I was a little confused when the narrator yells at the spouse for cheating, though. Did the other person really cheat? Or was the narrator just being paranoid?

Keep up the good work and I look forward to reading more of your work.

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#2346849

Review of Horizons (Working title)

Review by Pocohontas73

Rated: 18+

| (4.0)

Really moving. I almost cried. Aside from a few typos, it was great.

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#2330749

Review of THE CATCHERS

Review by Pocohontas73

Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

It took me a moment to figure out what the storie was about, but I kept reading because the characters were so interesting. Although the story used a lot of British slang and rugby terminology I was still able to follow it pretty well. Also, it was hilarious. Who would have ever thought of writing a story about turkey wrangling. Great job.