There are tons of possession stories, but the idea of having the souls being pushed out instead of just being dormant or whatever is seemingly rare. Interesting approach with the suit; gives the story more of a sci-fi feel. If you like writing possessions then this could be story you might want to add to. However, you could cultivate an interesting story if you focus on the facility. How did the facility develop such a suit? How long was the facility there? What was the ultimate goal of this project? Lots of directions that a writer could take to answer these questions which makes the potential of this story elevated to a diamond in the rough. Just needs somebody willing to give it that polished finish.
Truly an original concept for a possession story (at least one I've seen). The idea of a blowpipe shooting a person's soul through a dart into someone else's body is awesome in its own right. More people should add to this kind of story and if you're reading this then please do.
One of my favorite concepts for sure. I guess my only problem is how to make the wig get on the person's head in an organic narrative, especially a complete stranger. However, this is a personal problem and will not reflect my rating overall.
I enjoy the concept of this interactive story. I know there a lot of Pokemon stories, but having the setting placed in "Mystery Dungeons" is a nice touch.
Most of the writing is good and coherent, I can understand what is trying to be conveyed. I don't see a lot of furry related stories, let alone possession ones. All in all, good job and awesome idea. There's no tips I could give out as it seems this story is thriving quite well.
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