This was a good poem! I liked your meter. It was very interesting and I liked that you kept it consistent. I like your passion as well. It reall came through in your writing. It sounded like you might have had a very personal experience during those bombings. It's a very interesting idea to actually dye your hair different colors to make a point.
Great short story. I liked the twist at the end. I really think that your writing is very good. The beginning part was very descriptive and I could actually feel the emotion that you were trying to get across. I'm trying to think of something negative to say about it but I can't. I thought it was great.
Today, I was sitting of the soft casually watching the action
Quickly, he started wishing himself and pretending he hadn’t been waiting for birds
I really enjoyed it. I can honestly tell you what you alread know. When you have cats - NOTHING IS SACRED! They love to lay on it, climb on it, walk across it, or pee on it. Still they can be a lot of fun.
The journal entries were very entertaining. I could see someone making a short file about Fred the cat. I have cats of my own and I know exactly what she is talking about when she says she is on the phone and the cat is playing with her. Also I have seen my cats put their paws under the bottom of the door and try to pull it open. It is the funniest thing until you are trying to sleep, then it's not very funny at all.
Good writing. I will definately read the next installment.
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