Impressions: I really liked reading this. It had a very nice flow to it. The last verse was my favorite, the line:
Yet either way basic awe won’t abate,
because the cosmos appears to be right.
This was really well written. I'm glad I got to read it today!
Grammar/Spelling: No issues that I noticed.
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Impressions: Wow. Just wow, this flowed like something out of a dream. There are so many good lines in here, I'm not sure if I can even pick a favorite, but let me try. :)
In a focus unbent,
praying ambivalent,
you're the postcard unsent
from somewhere you haven't been.
I really loved this. On my first read through I stopped and read it twice because it was so good to me.
After reading this and a quick browse of your profile I can see you are very talented. Thank you for sharing with us and Thank you for the great read!
Grammar/Spelling : No issues that I noticed.
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Impressions: Great flow in this poem. Short but to the point and I really liked it. Grammar/Spelling:No issues that I saw.
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Introduction: Paced well and captures the readers attention. Plot: Interesting concept and well executed. Setting: NA Character(s: None as this is more of an instruction manual. Dialogue: NA Format: I like how you formatted the story. Grammar: No issues that I caught. Ending: The chapter that ended was written well. I look forward to reading more from this manual. My personal thoughts: A unique writing. Refreshingly witty and unlike anything else I have read on the site.
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Impressions: I really liked this poem even though it is sad. It is definitely a reflection of many peoples current state of living at this time. I also thought it sounded like it would make for good song lyrics with the 'how did we get to this state' repeating line in each verse. Grammar/Spelling:No issues that I noticed.
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Introduction: The introduction was interesting. I especially liked the first three words. "Time, not magic" that caught my interest and I had to keep reading from there.
Plot: The plot was well formed.
Setting: The setting was described very well.
Character(s: Your main character was interesting and fit in well with the story.
Format: Well formated. Presentation was nice.
Grammar: Nothing jumped out at me that needed to be fixed.
Ending: The ending was strong and descriptive.
My personal thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story. The integration of fantasy and reality is always something I enjoy reading about and you wrote about it very well. Great work!
Introduction: This short story has a powerful introduction.
Plot: Well defined plot for a 120 word story!
Setting: Even with out much written description you did a wonderful job of conveying the setting.
Character(s: The characters are vivid and interesting.
Dialogue: Flows well with the story.
Format: Looks great.
Ending: Strong ending, leaves you wondering!
My personal thoughts: I liked this short story a lot. Not only was I impressed that you could convey a whole story in 120 words but you did such a great JOB at it too!
Thanks for the great read! Write On!
Thank you also for reviewing my story: A Thimblefull of Trouble
Have a great day!
Gypsydoodles :)
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