After thoroughly reading every (female) story, some even a couple times, my rating still stands strong. Quality in most of these tales hardly suffer, and the characters are all unique in their own way. Long chapters that seem to enrich the moment, that even many other qualified writers on this site has added, along with the founder. Everything is described well enough to make you feel immersed and help you very well imagine what's going on as Maria gets fattened by a pig cult, or Johanna is inevitably immobilized as her lust-ridden partner lay limp across the room.
Even though this is a fetish oriented piece, you can tell there is still meaning behind it, which doesn't usually happen, and that's amazing. Every character has their own goals, and their own reasons for their goals. Yes, many might have the same idea, but that idea is molded to fit each character. There is also a loose representation of a map that has been formed from its contributors, and it's luckily one that isn't too complicated and you learn about each one as you go. Even better, what makes this a good read is that it doesn't expect you to go out and read some field manual before writing. It invites you to learn as the story develops, making it interesting to see as you know more about a suspicious area or possible safe zone, but enough of the praise!
To begin, though I know about these towns and their basics, I've never been able to properly visualize where each one is, as well as there distance from each other. These two things are crucial to adventures and can make the difference between a small walk or traversing threatening terrain. It makes it difficult when writing to want to even put them in the same story, but that could leave the answer to be given by another author.
To continue of of towns and villages, the main recurring ones have all been threatening and evil. One has much more depth to it and some caring citizens, but wouldn't a major town that wasn't full of people that wanted to fatten you up be nice. Sometimes it's good to give a poor character a break, and it breaks the predictability.
Predictability isn't the only found in towns either. sometimes the descriptions of character weights just become carbon copies of others, especially at higher masses. always multiple chins, always a massive belly that is bigger than the other still large parts. Variety in body types would be a great solution to this. Obviously not just outwardly stating "Haha she pear shaped" but more describing her much more rotund rear that seems to hold just a little bit more than the other parts. Also, not everyone has to have multiple chins, even at high weights. Every character is different. some could bear 3 or 4, others could be fortunate enough to just have a softer face. No body is produced the same, and describing just with more variety could add uniqueness and in a way, develop those characters.
All in all, it's a beautiful story, and I'm glad I do take part in some of it. There are some errors, but they aren't glaringly bad, and the story takes you right back in. And if there's one thing I forgot to mention, I absolutely adore how many of the stories are connected with each other is some way. It makes it all feel more alive and together. |
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