"His Poem" is a powerful and surprisingly uplifting piece that captures the feeling of unfair treatment before pivoting to a deeply personal declaration of purpose. I really enjoyed this thematic shift in the poem. The opening lines "Thank you for always being there... Even though at times you are being unfair" immediately pull the reader in with their conversational honesty.
The strongest part of the poem is the transition from feeling isolated "I’ve never been the type with that many friends" to recognizing self-worth and personal mission "I’m doing my job while I’m here on earth". The use of simple, direct language makes the emotion feel raw and incredibly relatable. The final stanza beautifully summarizes the poem’s message of resilience.
To make the poem even stronger, consider elaborating on the "unfair" aspect you mention in the second stanza. What is the specific 'it' that bothers the spirit? Providing a little more concrete imagery or an example of the conflict you are overcoming would give the reader a deeper sense of the struggle and make the resolution feel even more earned. This is a great piece of writing about resilience. Keep sharing your work!
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