Nice piece of work. I would just like to know what made you chose this perspective on God? Was this always your outlook on God for you to have written with such ferocity? Nonetheless Pooja Shah, it is an eye opener and a think piece. Keep up the good work.
This piece does remind me of when I was a child. Like I can feel the wind on my face and the grass beneath my feet. That innocence in us & the beauty of nature itself. The flow is great; it goes together, but is a little bounce as if a child were to be speaking it.
The ending took me for a whirl, like who are these people, I was confused for a moment. But overall it was cute. Something of what a typical newly wed couple would do/argue over. Tim and Beck seem like an adorable couple. And putting DIAPERS ON MICE. Flippin' GENIUS!!
I love the sensory details of this piece. It made me feel like I was in a chilly setting looking for a sweater and some hot chocolate. Then, as Mathias began to speak of Tad, my motherly instincts kicked in and I wanted to just help take care of him too. No matter how old he is, he's still someone's baby that deserves decent love and care.
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