Wow. Just wow. This was really fantastic. I literally teared up at one point. I was so afraid that Tucker was going to jump, but I was also given the hope that he wouldn't. You've done an excellent job of creating this character that he truly seems real, like I could just as easily go get coffee with him. You wrote just enough so I understand that he was abused, but you didn't tell me every little thing; it leaves room for imagination, which make the entire story that much more chilling and awful. Great job.
This was fantastic. Anyone who has known even the shadow of pain can relate to what the character goes through, making her a piece of interest. You made the character come to life with every detail expressed, whether it was the way she touched her face or felt the tears roll down her face. I especially love the way you end the piece, with her becoming full of hope yet realizing that the time will come when hope will run out, if she cannot escape. Bravo.
My first thought is, "What next!?" You certainly kept me engaged throughout the story. I do wonder if you plan to continue with this story, or if you intend to end it here. Either way, it makes for a good short story. There is some grammar issues out the wazoo (I'd be happy to edit for you if you'd like), but once I got past that, I enjoyed the content.
The overall topic of this poem is interesting and quite appealing, but it is hard to recognize or appreciate it because of the grammar. I'm not talking about the typically unimportant capitalization - I'm talking about the verb tense. For example, the "have" in line 2 should be "has." I think if you went in and edited further, this poem could be really good and strong.
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