It sounds very catchy and sucked me in the second I started reading. This is something I would most deffinetly read and you should really finish it or add no chapters. I would most surely come back to read more.
I felt like the line "A windmillbduring a tornado" didnt really flow with the poem, you should also maybe add some commas to give the readers pause. Other than those to minor things, the poem was really nice. I could feel the anxiousness of just wanting to be accepted and loved, and feel that in some weird way everyone can relate.
I enjoyed it alot, if anything I think you should add more descriptive sentences, you know describe how everything looks, to paint an image for the readers mind. Other than that I say Bravo I loved and enjoyed every second of it! The begining had me laughing a bit since you referd to rain so much and my names Raine haha unfortunatly one of the downsides of having such an unusual name.
Much love, Raine
P.S. Def. consider wrighting some fantasy novels, I absolutly love all type of fantasy and would most surely buy a copy :)
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