For a short poem your writing is great. The rhyming scheme is catchy and prominent. The poem in itself creates a beautiful imagery and the poem shows sophistication. The only oddity I found was the title. Even though it was befitting with the actual poem the contradiction in sophistication and class between the poem and its title made it rather peculiar. This is just my opinion but I think you should make the title a bit more classy to match the poem. Otherwise the poem is appropriate for everyone and the words portray a certain insecure sort of character that has the courage to compose herself so it makes it really good.
'Is There Light Out There' is a good poem. It captures raw relate-able feelings and the essence of depression or darkness perfectly. Although it depicted depression and emotion perfectly the structure isn't anywhere as good as that. With your writing skills I think you could aim for much better. My advice would be to bring a sense of organization into it because it seems rather haphazardly put together.
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