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Review by Veronica Duquet Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Oh wow....Cold is definitely the perfect title for this piece.
To me, at least, you are describing an abusive relationship and you have done a fantastic job of doing so.
I only have two suggestions.
1- I would add the word "of" to the line "And walk out the miserable house,".
2- I would suggest using less common words as descriptors throughout the piece. It would give more strength and depth.


Otherwise, great job!


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