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Review by rayman77 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I can imagine the pain and sadnes of putting these words out there.
I see where you are trying to go with the red, but it makes it difficult to read. Don't change the color, but make your font a little bigger.
unrequited love is the worst feeling. sometimes you just have to forget, but easier said than done. How do you control how you really feel about someone. I don't think you can. If you ever find the on/off switch for love then please let the rest of the world know. :)

Loving someone already taken isn't hateful.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
wow
that was good.
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Review of True Love  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I think its safe to say you are crazy in love with someone, and you should probably give this person this poem.
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Review of What Should I do?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
the thing is someone would notice.
To me many of your words are scarily accurate. I personally am not really suicidal anymore, but I still feel it. It is hard to change. Who knows when that spectre will come storming back. The question is more about caring enough to do something about it. Invisible walls really suck after a while, but I digress...

nice poem, good way to express some deeper feelings, getting it out there, and possible showing others there own feelings is a positive.

...and at your age you haven't even begun to live yet. :)
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Rated: E | (4.5)
strong, heartfelt words
very good at reminding me of the agony and ecstacy of finding true love.
...as if I needed reminding


good work :)
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Review of Feelings  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Nice and direct about a fustration that perhaps many have felt from both sides of the equation.

nice work.
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Review of Mind Right Now ..  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
something worth the read.
your other poem was interesting as well

... and alice in chains freaking rocks :)
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Review of Rain  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I love the rain...maybe for the same reason. Dark is nice too.

Nice writing.
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Review of It hurts  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Very true if one has the courage to do it I guess

nice poem
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Rated: E | (4.0)
lol
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Review by rayman77 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Writing with such a depth of feelings that you can only experience smacks of someone older than thirteen, but anyway I think it is good with an honest point of view.
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Review of I Am  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Very true,
I like it.

: )
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Review of Sharp  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I liked this. It would have made a really good episode of the twilight zone. Would have been nice to have the last part stretched out a little more to increase the suspense. Show some emotional conflict with the dad...fighting urges he does not really understand, urges that slowly consume him. Like I said though, I liked it. Good story.
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