I liked this. But when you write, why do you make the paragraphs so short? I am a reader who enjoys to read looooong aluring paragraphs. I would try adding a few longer paragraphs next time. The beginning of this really hooked me. It made me want to find out more. Who is this Ms.Taylor? Why is this character excited. Those questions were answered all in good time.
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