\"Writing.Com
*Magnify*
SPONSORED LINKS
Printed from https://shop.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/re-laxing
Review Requests: OFF
26 Public Reviews Given
27 Total Reviews Given
Public Reviews
1
1
Review of Forgotten  Open in new Window.
Review by Re-laxing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
1) Nice poem with a great insight to how depressed people feel and how some become alone. 2) I think you could really use some punctuation to help the poem flow. When I was reading it, I didn't know when to stop and when to let it flow. 3) I think there is still a piece missing from this poem. I feel like it needs something, although I can't tell you exactly what. Maybe a girl or someone who he pushed away. I think that would kind of make it more personal and heart felt. 4) Good overall poem, stick with it.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!Open in new Window..
2
2
Review of The Daisy  Open in new Window.
Review by Re-laxing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Great brief, poem. I love the imagery of a lover and daisies. Just wanted you to know I really enjoyed it, and I don't see much room for improvement, perhaps you can elaborate upon the same idea in a longer poem.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!Open in new Window..
3
3
Review of IN THE MIST  Open in new Window.
Review by Re-laxing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
I like this poem; It's emotionally charged, but it isn't inward. Many people can connect to this terrible feeling of loving someone before they leave.I love the image of the mist. It creates a nice symbol within the poem, although I would have loved to see you reuse and elaborate on it. The idea of leaning on God is relate-able and contributes nicely to the poem. I do think a few punctuation marks would increase its flow and make it easier to read.
4
4
Review of Jesus Called me  Open in new Window.
Review by Re-laxing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
Great poem! Your spirituality is something that is lacking in today's world. It makes me happy to see someone else who believes god as I do.
5
5
Review by Re-laxing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
This is a great, heart-felt poem about someone you lost. I love the things you use to compare this person to in your similes and metaphors. They help create a strong image in my head.
6
6
Review of Alone  Open in new Window.
Review by Re-laxing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
It is clear to me that this poem was written from your heart. It is very good and true on so many levels.
6 Reviews · *Magnify*
Page of 1 · 25 per page   < >
Printed from https://shop.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/re-laxing