I really like this story. It is creative, unique, and well though out. While I cannot review things like spelling, and plot that much since that is up to the different authors, I can say that from the portion that I read, that it is really good. If you like this type of writing, I feel you might like it. Great job.
I still really like this story. I am not as amazed by the first two chapters. I would said that my least favorite part would be "Afterwards, I stuck my fingers inside “my” vagina to get a good sniff of the gooey stuff it was drippin.
The smell was interesting and it felt really strange to have something shoved into your abdomen." If I wrote this, I would remove this part, however we all have our opinions, and we all have our creative differences. This small nitpick however does not take away much from my interest in reading this.
Again, like my review of the first chapter, I like this one a lot. The writing is well written, there is good description, and the story is very interesting. That is the great thing. It is interesting, and it keeps the reader hooked on by using good grammar, good writing, and good description. Again, if I could I would give this 6 stars.
Although short, it is very well written. I would not include swear words, however I understand as how that helps portray how frantic and surprised the character. Then some works like the f word at the end of the fourth line are capitalized, when they should not be. Just a small footnote, to keep in mind. Overall, it was really good.
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