Yes, this is my kind of story. It builds up momentum, and keeps the reader interested, while creating an atomosphere of creepiness. Very interesting and well done. I personally had a similiar experience years ago, and so this piece brought back some exquisitely chilling memories. GOOD work here. realist101
Hi there, I love this story line, it is beautifully written, there is one word that needs removed, in your fifth paragraph, you accidently repeated the word "that"? Other than that it looks really good! Very interesting and the ending leaves the reader wondering if the little bird dodges the falcon...it is doubtful, but does happen...? Good job!! Susan
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