This is a beautiful poem. I love the imagery of butterfly wings and rose petals to represent the beauty in the world. You paint a gorgeous picture of how a broken world may be fixed. I love it.
I like how you put the reader right into the moment with descriptions that draw them in. I would suggest that maybe you give a little bit more plot, like telling how the two characters got together and what demons were in the narrator's past. This is a very mature and educated writing style, though. I like your word choices and sentence structure, very well written.
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