umm this is intresting. You have a pretty good thing goin, makes me want to be more. Though it seems to be very repative, but draws the reader in none the less
This was intresting,i never heard of Thanbauk until now. At first your intro thing,explaning what this form is really confused me. But i understood after reading it. I rather like it, and what you wrote :)
wow i didnt realize how diverse everyone is these days, well i guess it was bound to happen seeing as how noat many peopl are just one race anymore. :)
umm wow, your title pulled me in. thought the topic was intresting, couldnt answer seeing as i am lesbian. wish i could though........any spefic reason that made u ask though? just wondering is all
I think he is a combination. HE is gods son, so not god himself, but maybe god in spirt. He was a great teacher, tought us of god , of faith. He was also man, after all he didi bleed blood, he felt pain and born of mortal womb.
wow! this piece is amzing! I loved your discriptions and word choice. Also, how you gave a lil of the characters background story before talking about the present. I like how your captured the readers emotions, and made them run wild with the story. This was a great, yet sad, story!
ok, so you said you were writing this for kids, right> I was just wondering what age group your were targeting ( cause kids in general is a very broad lot). If it was for kids around the sixth grade then i think you did a very good job. The length of the story and the vocabulary is well suited for them. If it was for elementry kids then i dont think it is as well suited as it could be, and any mention of pain for kids 10 and under is ususally frowned upon, even if no one did get hurt to bad, like when you talked about smoking getting hurt and going to the vet. BUt all in all i think you did a swell job! God look on the other seven
wow, this was reaally funny. writing political pices isnt an easy thing, cause you always offend somebody. BUt you did a very ggod job. And the humor of this was actualkly quite tasteful. With out any singling out or name bashing. A piece to be enjoyed by all political views.
This poem was very well written.Everything fromthe words, to the imagry, and personification of wind just simply works. There arent any faults, and it is easy on the readers eyes. This is also structured well, and it read smoothly. Overall this poem is great!
THis poem is quite intresting. It includes alotof diffent emotions, like saddnes,griefy, rage, and blissfulness; but yet it manages not to be confusing.You have a great selection of vocabulary, and a touch of imagry.Makingit fun to read, and enjoyable!
I must say that the whole idea of vampires and Van helsing is amzing. I am a collecter of vampire books,form I, vampire to Bram stokers Dracual; and i must say that you did not do half bad with this. Aslo,i like who you were descrpitive of the characters,its makes it easier to "see" them
It is always great to learn more about authors,or just people in general. And i must say, you have written qutie a bit of books and other things. As for your intrest, i have learned that we have a couple things incommon. I too share a love for classical music and the show CSI. :)
Wow,i was suprised by the results of this. This poll covers a contriversial topic, but the question was just simply great. Its nice to see the discussion of something useful for once, and something that has a meanin; a nice change from the immatur he said she said or childish crap i hear in high school.
This piece is well written, and the whole idea or central plot of this story is quit creative and very orginal. I like the whole military can be really succesful when used in a way shuch as you have. I love how your qriting is mature, and the words you use make you think a litte, and are not just the normal simle ememntary words we are use yo readin
I really like the way this wriiten, the word choices were appealing but not hard. The imagery in this was wonder ful, applying to two senses, touch and sight. The old man in this seemed as if he was real, and the story read as if it was real. I love how you used the view point of the old man, and how you used colors in your descriptions.
This was a very nice haiku. Im ususallly not one to runderstan these, but your was very easy to read; and it floowed well too. Although there iisnt mucch room to work with, you chose your words wisely. ANd only put down the nessicary.And the message to it was well recived and quite clear.
it was very nice; just short, simple, and to the point. All though you didn't have much room to work with, you mange to do a great job. Your choice of words rocked, and you manged to paint an image in my head with just those few words.It flowwed well, and over all it was very sweet!
Your poem was extreamly intresting. I love your imagery, and your attention to detail is very nice.
Also, your wriiting theme/topic is very good. The straightforwardniss of it is awesome, and how everything you said had a reason. Your structure was great too. And over all it rocked!!!
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