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Review of BVDs  Open in new Window.
Review by Lapin Agile Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Just the title was enough to spark my interest on this one. I have to tell you I felt a little pit like a "peeping tom" in the sense that I felt as if I were observing an indelicate moment so to speak. I thought there might be an alternate word for one of the 'ing's" as in "restraining the laughter straining."
Fun to read and gave me a good smile.
Richard
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
I think for a beginner, as you claim to be, you are doing quite well. An awful lot of thoughts in that paragraph and all seem to explode I couldn't find cover but that's good so keep it up. Long sentences can be good is properly controlled; you're not Wm. Faulkner yet! Good job.
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Review by Lapin Agile Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hey there, I like it and like your style. Admitedly rough and not for the choir but then again I doubt that's your target audience. I think you say things in a forthright manner to be sure and I just checked to see if I still had any scabs left on me or were they all pulled off to revealed the naked truth? Nice job.
Richard
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Review by Lapin Agile Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
I liked it and enjoyed the flow of your story. Nicely done.
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