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Hello there,

          Initial Impression
I thought this was a cute poem that captures the very essence of what one feels when they are around a puppy. Great!

          Imagery and Feel
I thought the imagery was pretty well done, but in some places I felt like there was more 'tell' than 'show': precious, make you think, "wow"! / putting all this in one / package can't get more cute. Although I appreciate the sentiments of these lines, it doesn't really 'show' us how adorable it is, but rather just tells us how to react, y'know?

          Overall Impression
I thought this was a cute poem and I enjoyed the end line. It itself was pretty darn cute! As far as I can tell you followed the rules of the form, but could use a tiny bit of work on imagery in a couple of places. Thank you for entering, I hope to see you again!

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Hello there,

          Initial Impression
A sad poem that accurately portrays depression. While the topic is dark, it is true to the nature and well thought out.

          Imagery and Feel
There is definitely a distinct sadness to this poem, which is accurate to its title. I liked the use of 'd' words, especially the descriptive ones, like: dust (covers), daringly (high), drama, distractions.

          Technicalities
From what I can tell, this poem fits the form for the contest well and follows up with pretty good imagery. My only thought for improvement might be to add some more punctuation where it's needed, as there already is some in the first place.

          Overall Impression
A darker poem that fits the form and has decent matching imagery. Thank you for entering this round, hope to see you again!

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Hello there,

          Initial Impression
I thought this was a very lovely poem. I like that it both fits the form and actually captures the meaning of Pleiades.

          Imagery and Feel
I think there is a lot of imagery in this poem. I was especially fond of: star clusters up in the sky, shine against pitch black, and silent across cosmos. I find the end line to be a reflection on anyone who has ever gazed at the night sky and wondered in awe at the vastness of the universe.

          Technicalities
As far as I can tell, you're spot on with the form, and the imagery is pretty good.

          Overall Impression
I can see nothing I'd like to improve upon, and I think you did a good job with form and imagery. Thank you for entering this round, and I hope to see you again!

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Hello there,

          Initial Impression
At first I thought the opening couple of lines were almost leading up to a rhyme because they flowed so well together and just sort of had that 'off rhyme' to them in a couplet.

          Imagery and Feel
I think you picked some great 'm' words to describe this poem of memories. I like how you described memory as being almost fluid-like like sand, but what I found most remarkably thought provoking was the last two lines: merge into the present / modify the future.

          Technicalities
As far as I can tell, you've done everything correct to fit this type of form. On a couple of re-reads I discovered that I was having some mild difficulty with flow. I don't think that punctuation is necessary for all types of poetry, but I'm almost wondering if in this poem it may do it some justice. There are a couple of spots with 'harsher' sounding words, and with all of the repeating 'm' sounds (not just in the beginning of the lines) it tends to get a little confusing. For me, I seemed to break this into couplets in a way, as every two lines seemed to work perfectly.

          Overall Impression
I liked this poem and found the descriptions and imagery to be truthful and well written. My only thoughts for improvement are more of a personal preference on flow and technicalities. Thank you for entering this round, and I hope to see you again!

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Hello Kitty,

          Initial Impression
First, I just want to say that I love the image you used in helping capture the essence of the imagery within this poem. I think it's a great example of the playful nature of terriers!

          Imagery and Feel
I think you did a pretty good job at showing how terriers and dogs in general are. I think the opening is the strongest area of the poem: The dog is ever close, / teasing me with his ball. - I feel as though every dog owner has experienced this particular moment.

          Technicalities
As far as Pleiades form, I think you did an excellent job mechanically; you followed its form with its title, first letter, and syllables. I think you canvassed a lot of areas of what it's like to own a terrier, but I think you told us a lot rather than showing us. This is why I liked the opening especially. It gave me a feel on the imagery rather than just telling me what's going on, as seen later with lines like terrorizing the cat or taking me on wild runs. I think the ending was strong, and sweet.

          Overall Impression
This is a solid poem that follows both the prompt and form well. Thank you for sharing this and entering the contest. I hope to see you next round!