Hello,
This poem is a wonderful piece. The word choice was amazing. I would have love to seen some imagery though. The word magic means something to everyone in a different meaning this would have been great to had imagery such as "Their tendrils of gold and silver takes root in my mind." Great poem.
Hope you are having a good day.
Rixa
Hello,
I couldn't help cracking up in laughter at the end of this story. I think I would have it that guy. The setup was wonderful with just enough to allow the reader to be just as confused as the main character. I did find some grammar issues such as "I truly believe that although George..." instead try "I truly believe that, although George..." To allow the reader to pause instead of rushing through that sentence which makes it choppy. Try reading your story out loud to see if there are grammar issues because that has happened to me on many occasions when I don't read my story out loud. Great story.
Hope you are having a good day.
Rixa
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