Hi. This is a good start of a longer story. You should definitely continue it. I would be interested to read it. I just hope that you change the font color and insert spaces between the paragraphs as the way they are now it's a bit hard to read. :)
Hi. I like your small story a lot. Especially the description of the kitchen. It's very vivid. My only remark is - I don't know if it's just me, but all the names start with R and it confuses me a bit. Maybe you meant it to be so.
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