Wow that was very good. I found my self thinking back to my child hood. Again you explain everything so realistic, i can't help stopping and reminiscing. I believe that a story like this should take you back. I could picture everything you described. Thank you for your good writing.
Only found one mispelling, (ever hole).
Again good job.
Once again Peek-a-boo, you've drawn me into a story where I can picture everything, the sounds and her feelings. The only disappointing part is the ending, it seemed very abrupt. I would like to see alittle more info on what happen. But it did leave me second guessing, which I love in a story like this.
Was it the Mafia or a maintenance problem.
Keep up the good writing.
Oh my gosh young lady your style changes so well it takes me in and makes my imagination go crazy, which is good. I've seen your styles evolve so well, I can hardly wait for your next story. I would love to see you do a mystery. I only suggest that you watch your spelling which is minor. ie; "like the took you mother" and also "a great service for you kingdom", that does not take away from your rate of 5.0. Keep up the good writing, looking forward to your next one.
Once again you have taken me into your story, where I feel myself standing there looking in this forrest and seeing Sarah go threw her routine, being snubbed and harassed
by the different animals. I could feel her sadness. I can see the monkeys throwing the mangos and laughing.
When you describe the pond it seemed so surreal. I could see the swan with its anger and wings spread and then become so calm.
How you ended your story gave me peace and made me feel that Sarah was ok and content.
Keep your writing going. Looking forward to your next one.
This is awsome, wish i had this when I was teaching sunday school.
Using humor, its a great way to share gods word. Keep up the good writing. I would love to read more. I will put you in my favorites.
I found an error on the following sentence..." He showed us that we God can do anything through us if ", there was another but I can't find it right now.
Looking forward on your next story.
Jim, I love the way you drew me in to the story and built up to her gracious morning. While also bring her down to her hectic morning in her office. Then taking her to where we must go sometime in our lives and then taking her to a reality of being.
It is about the trees isn't it.
Good writing.
That was the most beautiful eulogy I have heard in along time.
When a eulogy can bring a tear to your eye for joy to someone that has great feelings to a dear friend it is so filling to the heart that true love is in there.
Great job good writing.
I wish you the best in your comfort.
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