Your story is extremely well written. It is a very descriptive piece that quickly sucked me in, which is a great feat for such a short story. Your attention to detail is commendable and displayed as early as in the first few sentence. I was drawn in by the mystery of what was going on between Matt and his wife. It seemed as though there was some sort of party happening downstairs and he was being disturbed by it or maybe his wife and friend were having an affair. Whatever was going on, he appears to be out of the loop. Once Matt's wife appears in the doorway, things get a little confusing or mysterious. At this point, I'm beginning to wonder if maybe his wife or maybe even his friend had shot him, and he was having an outer body experience, capable of seeing and hearing everything happening around him, but unable to physically respond. I was left wondering if this confusion was done purposely by the author. Whatever the author's intent was, I thoroughly enjoyed the piece and wouldn't mind reading more.
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