A poem written in moments of bliss-- that is what I feel when I read this. It is great that you feel this way. Enjoy while it lasts. More often than not, we are all bound to something or other-- the exact opposite of free.
As a suggestion, I would delete the trailing periods at the beginning of each paragraph.
This is a sweet poem. It sounds to me like the dreams a woman might have at the altar while getting married. Although, I am a little confused by the last two lines-- it sounds like the woman is not with her man and seems to be following or flowing like a river to meet him.
As suggestions for the poem, I would say that staying together in relationships is filled with ups and downs. and people change all the time. Its being together despite the changes that makes relationships great. That's why this sounds so much like a dream.
That being said, I would keep the poem as it is, except maybe to clarify the last one or two lines.
This is a cute poem. Definitely brings a smile. A bat and a butterfly? Well, stranger things have happened! I love the line, "She desires romance with light.".
This is a beautiful tribute. The part about teaching to ride a bicycle is touching. The last two line are my favourite,
"And even Death must have been a little ashamed
At his fate!"
Regards,
Sara
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