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Review of Band Class  Open in new Window.
Review by SarahPotter Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is really funny, and most of the matches in their work really well! Your piece is a good length, and it has a nice story line. You have a nice writing style, and I'll be looking forward to reding some of your other works. If I could say anything about this piece, then maybe there could be a bit more room to adapt it with the blanks; at the moment the situation is a bit restricted. However, overall, this is a fantastic piece, and I thank you for a good laugh XD
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Review by SarahPotter Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is really funny, good job! I like the bit about the heart attack because he was on time, that was funny. A suggestion I could make - maybe it might be better if you started from Hal's birth, and slowly progressed to his death with the seperate accounts of how late he was. Also, although I know it's a comedy piece, maybe the character could have developed a bit more? Like maybe what job he did could add to the humour. I do like the continous motif of things running out of gas though :P Good job, keep writing and thank you for this piece of entertaining writing XD
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Review of Whisper Of A Name  Open in new Window.
Review by SarahPotter Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
A really spectacular view on death, religion, love, and the begginings of hate (I hope that's what it was meant to be... :P) Even something so short and light as this really made me sad when she stopped being love, and it's a truly eye-opening fable. You have a good use of the senses, and your imagery is fantastic. GOOD JOB XD Thank you for your exellent story :D
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