The personality conveyed by the slight colloquialism ('off' to the salt mines) is a nice touch. The 'buckets of words' is also a very potent image. As far as can be read into a haiku I can't find much fault in this. Good work, you should write more, although you probably have, in which case keep at it.
I like the irregularity of the style within the boundaries of ABCB stanza (ie some lines uncapitalised, final stanza split into two). The content is fine but very face value ... what I mean is you can't really read anything more into the poem than what is written on the page. Not bad work, though.
Great couplets - not something you see a lot. Obviously a lot of research has gone into this or it is from past experience. Good use of building momentum, too. Great poem!
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