Great story. The flow of the story is really appealing and the descriptions are gripping. I'm a first year college student and was considering med school for a while. During this time I was mainly thinking about how going into medicine would mean witnessing and experiencing some horrid things. I couldn't stop thinking about how these mental images would be ingrained in my head. After much thought I decided to turn to my other passion psychology.
Great poem. I hope to be a neuroscientist one day and am studying all of these guys. It's great how you deconstruct them one by one. This is no easy task as they have constructed so much for us to think about.
This poem epitomizes what it's like to lose focus on something your passionate about and want to achieve. I just recently got into writing and it's now one of my passions but sometimes it's so hard to focus and say what you're really thinking. Once you finally do though it's one of the best feelings. Especially the fact that there's an outlet such as this to share it with other like-minded people.
A great poem that reminds me a lot about myself and my parents. I'm a college student who just went away to college this past year and it was hard on my parents. The poem shows that no matter what the prodigal son does wrong his parents will always love him. The logical flow of the sentence structure was superb.
Brilliant piece of work. Everything you said I can relate to. I'm just starting out with writing and I'm finding it to be one of the best ways to truly connect with another person. I've written some stories already and I feel like I've found a way to fully express my feelings, thoughts and beliefs. The pen is mightier.
I thoroughly enjoy your work level49. I too am a young adult who questions the morality of my peers. This piece encapsulates these feelings with the tone of the greats. Truly this and all your other work are really good.
Great descriptive story. I could see and feel what you were describing. The sand in the buttocks and such. My only thing is that the tone was a little flat. What I mean is that it didn't fluctuate. Some humor or oddity at period intervals would break up the ongoing tone. Just like how at the end you said, "If eyes could kill, many of our schoolmates would be dead already."
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