I enjoyed this story, easy going, neat and to the point which made me overlook a few spelling mistakes. The dreamy character of the man came across smoothly and I could see him in front of me, I in fact liked him. And what a magical end, he must have quite a fantasy. Well done. Andrea
Just looked at some of your poems, I like the simplicity. It does not take a lot of words to make me sit back and reflect on it. The last line in particular: have I entered the second phase yet? Maybe. Have my friends or family? Excellent, just 4 words are enough. Andrea
What an interesting turnaround in the story and the courage Annie displayed. I am not so sure though if a girl having been abused by her father would be able to pick up such a courage easily. You say that she saw the good man in him. This is thing, could she? There is no real expanation for this twist.
Other than that I liked your train of thought and the description of the characters. Perhaps you may want to pay attention to spelling and grammer.
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