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Review of Stranded  
Review by Gemstone Warrior
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I Liked the story as it gave me the chills. The ending gives youi and idea that the natives killed Alan and were abou to do the same to Patty. It took me a moment to realized that they were sacrificed in the end.

The formatting looks good and the drama builds up to the conclusion very well. I didn't see any grammar or spelling errors at all. It is a very good suspense story.

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Review by Gemstone Warrior
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
The story short is very good. I was completely caught off guard when you showed the end. John steals from a house only to find that his wife resorted to being a prostitute to make money also.

Since is it only about a 100 words, it kind of hard to see it as complete. It is complete because you finished a scene but it feels incomplete since you only have one sentence as the ending. I'm assuming that the truth shook both of them and that leaves it open to how they will fix the mess.
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