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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Awesome story. And wow – it’s amazing that you came up with this while in high school. I can see why this is one of your more popular stories – not just because it’s about Anubis (well known as he is) and Kebehut (first time I heard of her), but because of the emotion.

“And then he knew. It was all over when he decided it was.”
I kind of teared up at this point, and then some more when he saw her again for the last time.

I’d just like to say that there are not many stories that make me do that.

At first, I couldn’t figure out what you meant by this sentence:

“…And even Upuat, the silent guard of the Hall, gave him an odd glance as he exited. The look reminded Anubis of something that he couldn't quite place. Hadn't he seen that look somewhere, long ago?”

…but on my third read-through, I realised it went with this:

“He was staring at the baby in a strange way. Nephthys had seen that look before. She remembered. Upuat. Every time she had seen him he had stared at Anubis in that same strange way… It was a stunned look, but also the look of someone who was trying very hard to bring their old memories into the light.”

I'll be re-reading Horus again after the short stories - I'm keen to explore the reasons and circumstances on why Upuat (and Set) have this look.

A shout out to Khenti Amenti – his presence never fails to amuse. Ha ha – he’s such a mercenary for food.
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