Hello, Wintersage. I am here for May raids,when I came across this intreging short story. What a well written storyline. I was kinda expecting a totally different ending. But that's what a good story does, it keeps the reader interested to the end. I was happy with this ending, especially with children playing pranks on the eldest sibling. You didn't have to get into extreme details because you used the right words to show your story. Good Read! 🤗
Hello, freespirit. I'm out for May reviews and here I am. I love 💞 the title,it's captivating these days. I liked how you start with the senses we are born with and your poem kindly says some people just don't have that common sense. I hate to admit it that my very own uncle,an English professer has '0' common sense. But he's the smartest man I know. God love him. I would like to see this poem centered on the page. It might make it look better or am I just thinking I have common sense? Lol
Good Read! I enjoyed it.
Hello, mix n match. I'm cruising for May reviews and came across your poem. The title captured my attention first off. And,Yes! There are many people that I know that are bipolar. Including some of my family as well. Your flow is well done and keeps the reader interested. This was written in a way that truly explains in detail what a person dealing with bipolar goes through every minute of every day. And most of them are just misunderstood. I really appreciate you writing this for all to see. I cannot add any improvements here, except adding an (Awareness to bipolar address at the end for anyone who wants to get in contact with an agency's for help). 🤩💖. Good Read!
Hello, my friend, I'm here for an anniversary review and I wanted to stop by and read from your port. I'm happy I chose this beautiful piece of poetic love between Megan and Prince Harry. I totally feel the same way about them as you did so in this story. It brought tears of joy thinking about his mother Princess Diana looking down from the heavens smiling at them with pride. This writing gives that same feeling to me. Well done T. Good Read!
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Hello, elizjohn. I'm on a birthday raid and I stopped by for a read from your port. This story popped up and I must agree with your statement about the title. It is not what I expected. It's better! 🤗 You kept a nice flow with just enough rhyme to give the reader the vision you see in the water in your ending. I really enjoyed reading this poem. Your choice of wording and what the water does for each droplet are beautiful and inspirational. Well done!
Good read! 😃
Hello, Alisha P. I here for a birthday raid and I came across your awarded short story. I'm surprised that you are but a teenager and you enjoy writing. That in itself is awesome! And now you're a part of an amazing group of writers just like you. This story in my opinion I found to be written very well and imaginative. Comparing what one sees in a mirror makes complete sense when you say there are two faces. And your story puts that together in a way most of us never think of. Well done with this story. Keep writing and improving your skills. You're in the right place. WDC Rocks. 🤗
Hello,FlakesWR. I just stopped by for a read and came across your piece. This is great! The wording for the storyline is spot-on. Well, written and very interesting. Your prompt subject fits this awesome poem to the T. I really enjoyed this to it's end. My favorite line is in the second paragraph, "looking past a lonely maid who see but doesn't speak." It sent chills through my body. Well done!
Hello, Legerdemain. I'm on the winter raid and stopped by for a review. This is a very sweet story. I really like your word choices to make this snowflake come alive. And then adding the others as her sisters is brilliant! I also really love the way you set this up, it's snowflake icons and the paragraphs are nicely arranged. Good Read! Great writing.
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year
Hello, Dave. I'm on the winter raid and I had to stop by when I saw your title. I had to read it twice just for fun. I'm pretty sure I know a few folks who are just like the characters in this funny poem. You really got me in stitches. Every line is just as funny as the last. So I have no favorite, it's the whole poem. Great Job! I even think some of the characters are related to me. LOL
Good Read for the season!
Hello, LegendaryMask. I just read this script writing... And, "wow" it was great! I didn't know you could write scripts. Is there anything you can't write.😍 I really enjoyed this story and how you played it out. Jax is a good character and his girlfriend Arleigh is exciting. I liked how you kept the flow of the story up and on key! Good Read! 😉
Hello GivingThanksBrad, I stopped by and wanted to see this from the prompt given. I really enjoyed reading this. To me, you fulfilled the prompts expatiations. And with a wonderful story to complete it. You kept it spontaneous and entertaining. Very visual when George appears through a green misty portal when Ruby enters the hallway and there's no one there. I also loved the ending. Poor Ruby!
Good Read! :)
Hello, Eldos. This story is really good. The last lines are creepy. In a good way. It kinda sent chills up my spine as I read it. :o I wasn't expecting that! Good job, there! I didn't notice anything wrong with any of it. Your punctuation, commas, all of it looks good! The whole second paragraph totally throws the reader (well, me) off thinking that she really survived the accident all the way to the end. Thanks... Lol :)
Hello, Royal Eduardo. I just read you're short story. Very well written. You completely had my attention on this. I found it to quite thrilling to the ending and captivating. You provided good imagery and the story flowed well with the suspense. What I liked best is the kidnapped girl being a clone and putting the story in a busy New York scene was brilliant! I found no errors if there are any. The story was exciting and held my attention. Good Read! 👍
Hello, Fellicia Moh. I just stopped by this newsletter and a newbie read. Since it's a New Year, I wanted to read this. I really felt your words talk to me about setting my own goals for the New Year. I have so many to consider. Your second line, 'Hope',towered over us like an umbrella in a rainy season. That's what I felt like a good half of last year. Nervous, excited and afraid. -Yeah, that's what I felt like. Then also as the year continued, my mind was still set on going forward with my goal for the year. To be truly a published author. When, it finally came near the end of the year. "The rise of a new dawn." "A chance to make it" I soon felt that I fulfilled my goal. For once in my life I did something I promised myself I would do. Live by your own words, because time passes us by much too fast. Good Read! Keep up the good work, and welcome to the best place for writing and help and making new friends. Only at the WDC. 🤩
Hello, WriterAtHeart.
I stopped by to give you a requested review of your poem "Looking for the Rain"
The title is captivating, but the first line and the second to last line that are the same somehow do not sound correct to me. I can feel what you are saying but the word 'have' doesn't seem to fit right! Or maybe it's the whole line, "She always have bunch of people to roam" ??? Something is missing here, I can't explain it? I do like this poem quite well. It's just that line that has me confused a bit! In the 6th line, you wrote 'voices'. that is plural, it would flow better as a singular word "voice". Other than that this is a beautiful poem. Sadness and memorable at the same time. I really liked the 4th paragraph. It gives this poem feeling. These are my thoughts only. It is a good read. :)
Hello. Jay. I'm so happy to see you here! I really like this short poem of yours. It speaks louder than the words itself... I would like to make a suggestion, about the word "ideal" to me it would flow better with the word idea... What do you think? If that word works for you, then leave it alone. This is my opinion only. I do appreciate you writing in memory of all who have served and who are still serving our country. You will in time find many more writers here who are also retired service men and woman. Keep up the good work and never stop carrying on!!!! 🤗
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Hello, warped sanity. " Bravo" on this wonderfully written piece of writing. I really liked the repeated of the last verses and then how you changed the last verse to repeat it again. Nice touch! My cousins first born is Autistic, he's going on 38 years old and has never been a burden to anyone. He's smart, in his own way, just as you discribe the child in this poem. To me this poem has two sides to every paragraph. The Can do's, and the miss Understood struggles. I love it!
I used to be a special Ed teachers aid, and I so enjoyed going to work every day, that I felt privileged because I love my job! 🤗 Thank you for writing this and making aware the true vision of Autism.
Hello, Elycia 'I completed the book.' Thank you for you kind words regarding my illness. I am home now for the second time in the past two weeks. My blood pressure skyrocketed and gave me severe headaches. And I never get headaches, until now. I'd like to return the thank you with a review of this poem, The climb to Nothingness.
My first thought after reading this, to me it speaks in silence of the many stepping stones we come to in our lifetime. Everyone is different in the way we walk through the life. I really enjoyed the way you discribe that path in this poem. Our future is something we must search for to find our happiness in this world. Some finds are bad, but the good will always be there if we never stop looking and accepting.
Good Read! 🤗
And Thank you again. Have a wonderful sale week!
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Hello, Icanterbareback. I am on the summer raid and thought I would stop by for a review of your story/poem 'Hands'. The title of this captured my attention first. I wondered how this would be written about hands. And you did a wonderful job with this. It tells of the one thing most people don't see when they meet new people. I think now I will have to start looking at people's hands just to get the experience in this piece. I did enjoy reading this and I like the story line behind it.
Good Read! Keep up the good work. 🤗
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Hello, Nick. I'm on the raid today and I've stopped by for a read. This free verse poem says a lot deep within the words. Especially in today's world. Society is an open book, you can't get away from it. It makes it hard to really put your trust in someone. For fear that they may tell only one other your shared secrets and feeling and in just a few minutes it's all over the www. Exposed to the public, nearly. This poem is very true, and it implies that there are others in your life that you can trust. I like that you placed your parents at the top of the list when looking for trust in your life. And only close friends, are trustworthy. Might I suggest that you add having 'Trust within yourself' too. 🤗💫 Good Read!
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Hello, Ratdog. I'm on the raid today and stopped by for a read of your receipe for Ratdog's Barbecue Chicken Stew. First here to you🍻. I really enjoyed reading your directions for making this stew. I also liked all the options you offer throughout the ingredients needed. It mad me laugh!!! 😃 It almost sounds like the way my husband would make a stew. Some folks round here would add roadkill as well. Lol (Not kidding.) 😲 You wrote a fine piece here. I might even let my husband try it out. He loves beer too!!! Good Read!
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Hello, Joy. I'm on the raid today and just stopped by for a read.🤗 This is lovely, what I liked best is the story it tells in such few words as she walks along the beach near the waters front. Also, it gives me while reading the same feelings this poem takes you. Every moment felt, and everything seen, like in slow motion. Stopping by a beach house and witinessing two lovers embrace, which recalls a memory of her own... Very lovely written. My only suggestion would be to shape this poem into a heart, or oval, I've seen some shaped so beautifully. This could be one of those. Or not. You've done well! 🤗🌹🌹🌹Good Read!
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Hello, Gigi3456. I saw this request in the Hub and thought I would stop for a look. I feel empathy for any or all of this story you endured. It truly saddened me that young girls just don't see the person hurting them when most everybody you know sees it. This poor girl; confused and hurt, emotionally and mentally by another creep of a man. A narcissist person is someone who can and will never put anything first, except themselves. They can't tell the truth for their own life. Because they live in a fantasy of themselves, while tearing down the person closest to them, the person who says they Love them. Your voice is being heard in this. But, there is light at the end of your tunnel... You left him... You're a better woman for it. And experienced at the narcissist kind. It is your time to shine. So SHINE On! I truly hope this has a happy ending. Good Read!
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Hello, Saige Cooke. I ran across this in the review board. It jumped out in front on my computer screen. (by itself) I must read. My first impression, I think, we are on the same page. The atrocities going on in this world, all over this world are endless and disturbing. What is there for our future generations? Because right now it looks nearly hopeless and so sad that people are deaf. Even though they say they are not. Prove me wrong, and I will gladly give you an apology.
But the way things are going around us everywhere, just know I'm listening to your poem very loud. I wish it would echo forever. Pray for World Peace! Good Read!
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