You used really good vocabulary and punctuation. There was also really good sentence structure. Although, I didn't quite understand what this poem was about. Will you please explain that to me? Also, I like the last verse alot. It made me giggle a bit.
You used lots of emotion. You also put a lot of thought into this because you can tell. I love your word choice and sentence structure. The only one mistake I saw was you didn't capitilize every line, like beauty and questions. You did connect with the reader. Your are a good poet. Write on!
This is an okay poem. The reason I gave it a rating of 2.5 is:
1) I didn't get the point.
2) I liked how it was repetitive, but it still didn't explain anything.
3) You did use good sentence choice, but I didn't feel emotion.
4) Also, I didn't feel any connection.
You always want to make a connection with the reader. Keep practicing...you will get there!!
Wow to come up with this quote on your own is great, very inteligent. Now what I wish for is to share this with my classmates for us to review and go over. We like talking about what we think it means. I like the words you used; ponder,cogitate,bitter,and irate,consolation. I like the fact that you speak about wondering, because I know for a fact that I always wonder about things. There is always a question of why or how. If you wish please rate and review my work.
I like how you shared this personal experience with the public. Creating an image as usual. A woman with horns seems quite strange. I like how you told us about the way the woman looked. You run the whole dream which is strange. The title caught my attention very much. You are a great writer and always catch my attention.
Wow this is very out there. Did you make up your own words? Way to create a picture in my head. I loved how you made it stick out in the static item by the title that also caught my attention. Although I didnt really understand it because of huge vocabulary; I really enjoyed it.
Wow, that was absolutely amazing. When you write chapter two please let me know because I would love to read it. You definitely caught my attention in several different ways. The big vocabulary shows a lot. You also used the five senses which gave me a picture of what all is going on.
This was a really great poem. I really like the way you used your 5 senses, which really caught my attention. I also like the fact that I was able to put a picture in my head of what is going on. I feel that you did very great on this poem. Thanks for letting me experience this kind of feeling of glory.
Don't forget to indent. Is this a true story? The story caught my attention because of the first two paragraphs. I really didnt get the point of the story. It didn't seem like there was any ending. It was great that y'all got found but at te same time does it really show what y'all did to get found.
Write on!
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