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Rated: E | (4.5)
         Wow this was totally unexpected. I thought I was going to read about a haunted house. What I read was a pleasant surprise. I really liked how the paintings were described. However, I was looking for more of a backstory regarding the girl.

         I was also wondering about the backstory regarding the house and its occupant(s). This could turn into a great novel if you're so inclined. Why would there be an unlocked old house in a modern neighborhood? I wonder if the house had some type of tragedy befall it.

         I did not encounter any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. Thiswas well written and has an excellent potential for a terrific novel. Good Luck!






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Review of The Offer  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
         This is not what I expected. When I first began reading this, it seemed boring to me. I am not used to these types of stories. This was full of lots of suspense and thrills. After I finished reading it, it reminded me of something out of "Hotel California".

         I did not encounter any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. This was written very well and the imagery was quite vivid. You did a great job! Write On!






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Rated: E | (4.0)
         I liked this. I never saw either version of the Ghostbustersmovies. This was action packed, thrilling, and suspenseful. It kept me and a true ghost buster on the edge of their seat.

         I did not encounter any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. This was well written. It flowed easily with vivid imagery. Nice Work!








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Review of The House Setter  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
         This is not what I expected. Wow! This story had me at the edge of my seat from beginning to end. I really liked this. I expected to read thgat Amanda and Dorie were doing house sitting to earn extra money.

         I did not encounter any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. This flowed easily and was written very well. It did leave some huge cliffhangers. I'm panting. Thirsty for the next drink of what happens next. Well Done! Write On!






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Rated: E | (4.5)
         I was looking for a detailed character sketch for my NaNo characters. I will begin this venture tomorrow and wanted a sketch that was going to filet my characters. Your sketch is asking for information that I never thought to ask. I hope this will be a great assistant in creating my characters.

         I did not encounter any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. This was compiled and composed very well. Thank you for providing this tool to use. Great job! *Thumbsup*






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Rated: E | (4.5)
         This poem is quite interesting and totally unexpected. I really liked the nautical theme. The comparison between a ship and life was very deep.

         I did not see any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. I loved the imagery. As I read its words, I was able to envision myself on the ship and being in the middle of the ocean.

         You wrote a very descriptive piece. Its analogies were crisp and exact. Great Job!






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Rated: E | (4.0)
         I really liked this piece. It describes the first day of school to a tee. It was full of imagery. It allows the reader to envision how a child feels when a new year begins.

         I did not encounter any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. The poem flowed easily. It described the day and all that goes into it exactly. It reminded me of my first days and the washing machine that was my stomach. Great job! Write On!






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In affiliation with I Write  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
         This story really surprised me. But it was a pleasant one. Although I usually don't read or write in this genre, I enjoyed reading this. I did not encounter any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. This flowed very well. It was easy to follow and had me with every word. You did very well with this Welcome to the site. Write On!






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Review of Winter's Cry  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
         These kind of stories are ones I like to read. They also make my emotions stir up. This holds the reader's interest. At first , the reader doesn't know where this is going. As they read on, it's apparent where the story is going.

         I did not encounter any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. This is very well written. Good luck with the contest. Write On!






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Review of Dazed  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
         I liked this but was left hanging. This is like giving me a taste of chocolate and denying me te rest. It needs to be expanded. Was this real or imagined?

         I did not encounter any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. This grabbed me from the start but left me in limbo. Needs more work. Write On!






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Rated: E | (4.0)
         When I first read this I noticed that the letters highlighted weren't the beginning letters. I have never encountered that in an acoustic before, Is this an Olympic sport?

         I did not encounter any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. I've seen this sport on television before, but never thought I could participate in it. It looks grueling. Nice job! Write On!






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Review of Teaching Angels  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
         I like this poem. It spoke to me. It reminded me of the "Christmas Story" that I was told since I was a child.

         I did not encounter any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. This was an easy read. Its imagery was vivid and the message was clear. Nice Work. Write On!






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Review of The Genes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
         When I first saw this, I thought it was a sci-fi piece. That is not my genre of choice. As I read it, I was pleasant surprised. It was a very easy read. Did it win the contest?

         I liked the comparison between 50,000,000 years ago and now. Nice touch. I did not see any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. This was short, sweet and to the point. Write on






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Rated: E | (4.5)
         I really liked your story. When I read it, it reminded me of a time that a similar incident happened to my father. Did you find out what was causing the problem with the motor?

         I did not encounter any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. The story flowed well and it's imagery was vivid. You did very well with this. Did you win the contest? Write On!






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Review of The Tire Swing  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
         My first impression of this story was tat it was going to be about a little girl, her dad, and an old tire swing. Boy, was I wrong. Happily, my emotions took me on a roller coaster ride that seemed endless.

         I really liked the relationship between Joe and his daughter, Rebecca. I wish I would have had that with my father. Even though Joe's mother was in the background, her being there to take care of Rebecca and help out when needed added an extra sweetness to the story.

         The setting wasn't what I expected, at first. That was until it was known that Joe was a trucker. It was then that everything fell into place. Writing about a small town and the closeness of its residents is what I like to read.

         I did not encounter any errors of any kind. This was written very well. The characters, setting, plot, spelling, grimmer, and punctuation were all done quite well. The story was an easy read. It flowed and its continuity were excellent.

         You did very well with this. I enjoyed it immensely. I thank you for the pleasure of allowing me to review this. Write On!






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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
         I'm not a fan of the fantasy genre, however, I liked your story very much. It flowed very well. I liked Queen Bee, a woman after my own heart. I did not encounter any spelling, grammatical or punctuation errors.

         I did not think this would be written in the fantasy genre, but it was a great choice. I know I would not want to be a member of Queen Bee's court or a commoner.

         You did great with this and congratuations on the well deserved win. Write On!






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Review of This I Believe  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
         As I was reading this, I wondered: Is this a short story? A chapter of a book?How should this be classified? It flowed well, but I was left hanging and asking questions. How old is the painter? Why wasn't the teacher more empathetic toward his/her student?

         I didn't encounter any spelling, punctuation, or grammatical errors. the story took me back to the days when I was in kindergarten and we had Show & Tell. I think this needs a backstory. Does this person love to be creative. What woke up that muse? Who knows? Maybe s/he will be a famous artist. It will be then when Roy will have to take a second look.

         I liked this. Keep up the good work. Write On!






























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Rated: E | (4.0)
         I like this story. I do have a few questions. How old is the little girl? Does her mother work for a state or government agency? This story took me back in time. When I was in grade school, i did go to work with my mother on Saturdays. It also seems that the girl's mother is in fear of he boss. She should have found someone to care for her child. Tht office isn't safe.

         I did not fimf any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. This is an interesting story. Its imagery was vivid. I felt fear along with the girl and her mother. I hope the mother's working situation can improve.You did very well with this. Write On!




























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Rated: E | (4.0)
         I liked the story , but there are a few things that could improve it. I didn't encounter any spelling or grammatical errors. It lists everything that happened on Bethany's first day of school.

         What needs to be done to improve the story is to delve deeper into Bethany and Ross's commonalities. What is their favorite color? What games do they like? Did they make friends with the other girls at the lunch table?

         This story has potential. It has a great start. Keep it flowing. Write On!













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Review of The Void  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (3.5)
         This is a very short poem that seems not to say very much. Who is the poem about? I did not encounter any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors.

         I am sorry that I am unable to understand the poem. Maybe what you may need to do is lengthen the poem for the reader to understand it.




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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
         I just read your poem and it seems to be all over the place. Maybe what you need to do is gather your thoughts and ideas and devote a stanza to that idea.

         I did not encounter any spelling or grammatical errors. I was told by a very reliable person that punctuation is used in poetry. You could use it.

         I liked the poem. It does have possibilities. If you have anything else that you would like me to review, send it to me. I will do my best to give it a straightforward review. Write On!








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Review of Two free verses  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
         These poems are both quite powerful. I am not very knowledgeable about free verse poetry. These poems spoke to me.It was almost like a parent telling their child how NOT to think about the word ugly. The second poem seems to be about trust.

         I did not encounter any spelling or grammatical errors. Punctuation apparently seems to be used in poetry. I did not know this.

         After reading these poems, I'll have to get reacquainted with the form. Write On!






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Review of Mother Superior  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
         I really liked this story. It took me back when I was in Catholic elementary school.I didn't find any spelling errors. However, I did find a few places where you should have called Sister Jesse by name instead of saying "the Nun.". I didn't see any punctuation errors.

         This story was very enjoyable and it made me laugh in spots. As I read it, I thought of the scene in the Sound of Music where Maria was trying to explain her tardiness.

         This is a great story, but it left me hanging. I was wanting more. It makes me wondering if Mother Superior pre-read Sr. Jesse's file. There needs to be a conclusion to the meeting. Maybe Mother Superior should say something to put Sr. Jesse at ease.

         Again, this is a great story. With a bit of tweeking, it'll be fantastic. Write On!😊



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Review of THE DATING GAME  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
         The first thing I have to say is this story needs to be written in a larger font. How do you expect a reader to read your story if they can't SEE it? You should also identify paragraphs. No, on to the story.

         I The story was a great story. It held my interest and had me on the edge of my seat. I wanted to know if this Ian would show up. The anticipation was eating at me. The subject matter is very timely. i, personally, think that blind dating is dangerous.I did not encounter any spelling or grammatical errors.Thank you for allowing me to read this.


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Review of Patricia  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
         I really liked this story. It reminded me of the time when I grew up. The innocence that was going on at the time, is a bygone era is a sweet memory.

         You could turn this into a book, if you want to. I'd want to know more about Patricia. She comes off as being sweet and innocent, but is she? What about Rich? Is he a rover? Or is Linda his first relationship that goes all the way? Does he get a lot of peer pressure? And Linda? Is she the town tootsies? Or does she give the impression of being an innocent? Then there's Norm. How did he and Rich become friends? What's his backstory.

         I didn't encounter any spelling or grammatical errors. This story was put together well. However, I, like other readers, want to know more. Great Job! Write on!


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