This is hilarious! I laughed out loud reading it! the only tip I have is to remove some of the unnecessary words to make the poem flow more smooth. For example, "I've weathered joy and pain and strife", you could change it to I've weathered joy, pain, and strife. It makes it easier to say and flow evenly. I love your poem, please keep making people laugh!
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