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Review by sabr Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
nice good use of imagery


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Review of Given  Open in new Window.
Review by sabr Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (2.5)
nice
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Review by sabr Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
nice very nice
good writing
keep it up


he article’s statement that the Star of Ishtar (an eight-pointed star, sometimes with a circle inscribed around it) is often found in the lower level of “occult buildings” and is thought to represent the underworld. However, a little cursory research also indicates that the exact meaning of this symbol is unknown. Since Ishtar was a mythological figure with a widespread sphere of influence (the article itself acknowledges that she’s associated with fertility, love, war, and sexuality), some believe the Star of Ishtar is representative of the underworld, while others seem to associate her with the opposite: the heavens. And absent any definitive documentation from the person who decided to put that image there, it’s impossible to tell what meaning they intended for it to have, or if they intended it to have any meaning at all. Sometimes architects and designers choose symbols for purely aesthetic reasons.

The same is true of the swastika. Most people associate the swastika symbol solely with the Nazis, but the swastika was a symbol of divinity and spirituality in Indian religion long before the Nazis appropriated it. In Jainism, it’s one of the ashtamangala, or “eight auspicious signs” and prominently displayed in many temples and other religious gathering places. In this particular case, the Nazis actually rotated the image slightly so it’s easier to figure out where someone’s inspiration to use the symbol in this day and age comes from, but the point remains that depending on the context and the circumstances, symbols (especially simple, elegant designs) often have multiple meanings and contexts.
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Review by sabr Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
nice
i would like to continue

even if u push me away
I am there for you

overcome ur fears and
embrace the strength I HAVE FOR you

what i can give u
might u ask

BEYOND this material world
beyond this skin blood bones

I give you the part of my soul
I give you my hearts peace
I give you the promise of never abondoning

do tell me how do u like it


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Review by sabr Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
wooooooooooooow
so relatable
gets under the skin in no time

i think i just needed to red this
where I am not alone
i dont know why
but even in pain when i am not alone
i somewhere get the comfort
and power to make the throne
ur writing is really authentic and pure

i loved every single bit of it
this is lovely
keep o writing babe
and u have my support as ur empress friend

have a wonderful and beautiful life ahead
thankyou for writing this
i would suggest to write on instagram or i can help u with it
lets create a page together wht say


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Review by sabr Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
🌟 Review for "A Wish Come True: Chapter 2" 🌟
Rating: 4.0 / 5.0

Overall Impression:
This chapter has a fast-paced, adventurous tone and introduces fun sci-fi elements like teleportation, time loops, and genius baby engineers—which is both imaginative and humorous! The dialogues between characters feel casual and fun, and there's clearly a group dynamic forming, especially with Jason’s moody personality and Ryla’s mysterious powers.

What I Liked:

The setting shifts are smooth and keep things moving.

Ryla’s backstory about escaping a time loop is intriguing and adds suspense.

The banter between Kent, Eliza, and others adds a nice touch of humor.

Including a futuristic engineering school run by babies is super original and quirky.

Suggestions for Improvement:

Punctuation & Dialogue Formatting: Many dialogue lines lack commas or punctuation, which can confuse the reader. Try:

"Hello," said Kent. instead of "Hello?" Said Kent

Each speaker should have their own line to help readability.

Character Depth: Jason’s anger is mentioned a lot—maybe hint more at why he’s this way to build emotional connection.

Scene Clarity: Some actions feel rushed. For example, Ryla touring a huge ship in 10 minutes and everyone immediately trusting her—this could use a bit more buildup.

Show, Don’t Tell: Instead of directly stating things like "everyone laughed except Jason," try describing the laughter or Jason’s reaction physically or emotionally to enhance immersion.

Final Thoughts:
You're clearly building an exciting universe with creative characters and funny twists. With a bit more polishing in formatting and emotional layering, this could become a really strong chapter in a cool sci-fi saga!

Keep writing! 🚀✨
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Review by sabr Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (2.5)
such a strong bold poem
full of pride and confidence


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Review of God's Woman  Open in new Window.
Review by sabr Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
wooooooooow
crushing into hearts of all
so true and raw
it is really beautifull
of how you weave so intricately and beautifully
the poem with rawness and truth

excellent work


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Review by sabr Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (2.5)
it nice and lovely


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**Review of “Breathe” by Sumojo**

Sumojo’s poem *"Breathe"* is a short yet deeply reflective meditation on the contrast between the concepts of “under” and “above.” The poet uses these directional opposites not only in a literal sense but as profound metaphors for emotional and psychological states. The word “under” evokes feelings of suffocation, suppression, and confinement — almost a sense of being buried, both physically and metaphorically. This is beautifully expressed in lines like *“I crave fresh air, not underneath, / Buried below a mound of earth or covers.”* It speaks to a universal human desire for freedom and light — for clarity and liberation from heaviness, whether emotional or environmental.

The shift from "under" to "above" is both tonal and visual. The word *“above”* immediately opens up a sense of release. There is a literal breath of fresh air that flows through the second stanza. The speaker finds solace in elevation — in the clarity, visibility, and calm of being above the noise and weight of the world. The longing to become a bird is symbolic — not just of escape, but of perspective. This desire to “look down on those below without a care” isn’t condescending, but rather a yearning for peace and detachment.

What makes this poem especially effective is its simplicity. The structure is clear and the word choices are deliberate yet accessible. The parallelism between the stanzas enhances the theme and creates a balanced rhythm. It’s a poem many readers can relate to — especially those who’ve ever felt burdened by life and wished to rise above it all.

Overall, *"Breathe"* is a tender and thought-provoking piece. It quietly encourages readers to reflect on where they feel most at home — beneath burdens, or in the liberating skies of self-awareness and breath.

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Review by sabr Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
YES EVERY WORD IS ALWYS RIGHT
loved it
very much poetic and inspiring
walking to the end
and every end is key to new begin
keep it up
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Review of a song I made up  Open in new Window.
Review by sabr Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
NICE
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Rated: E | (3.0)
namasate
really nice , well written i liked ur poetic metre , and the last line is wonderful
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