Wow. This was an intense story. My pulse was racing through most of this story, and I loved it. It makes you question what might be real and what might not be, as obviously this character's mind had him unsure of the truth. You did an excellent job building up the suspense in this story, when he himself was about to jump out under the car, it had me wondering whether or not he might have been the person who jumped in the first place. Very well written piece, my pulse still is up. Kudos.
I really enjoy reading your work, I thought I'd check out this piece, and was certainly not disappointed. I particularly enjoyed the description of the saloon when he first entered, "peppered with the salt of the town". Another thought provoking story. Much enjoyed, please keep writing, and I'll be sure to keep reading.
I loved this piece. The cynical tone of it reminded me of chuck pahlaniuk on multiple occasions, and it was very enjoyable. The way you tied things in from the event to the psychiatrist to the chair was very smooth, and it all tied up very nicely, I had guessed something similar about infidelity. The only part I thought seemed slightly out of place was when the boss died; it seemed somewhat rushed, compared to the way the rest of the story was playing out. I enjoyed the way you described it though, just like the rest of the story, numb.
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