Piratess Dawniebelle's (silverathame) Reviews

Piratess Dawniebelle

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#4291108

Review of Rainstorm

Review by Piratess Dawniebelle

Rated: E

| (5.0)

This is a perfect example of a thunderstorm. I really like how you used so few words to creat such perfect imagery of this storm. I love thunderstorms and this just reminds me so much of why I love them. The imagery and language you chose invites the person reading into the thunderstorm. I love this! Great job!

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#4264994

Review of Metamorphosis

Review by Piratess Dawniebelle

Rated: E

| (4.5)

This story is beautifully written. I especially like all the descriptive terms you used, they really open the mind to the setting and piece.

I also like that this is flash fiction and you did an amazing job of getting everything conveyed in so few words!

The only thing that confused me was the beginning but you tied it in the ending so I think it works well.

I'm always a little jealous of people who can write flash fiction, I am a person of many words. Good job at writing this, I loved it!

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#4263428

Review of The Letter

Review by Piratess Dawniebelle

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

This was an interesting read! I was expecting the joke to be on Cynthia but it looks like the jokes on Dan. That last part really got me. It made me wonder, where is she going and what will she do. I would love to see a little more elaboration on the details of description but overall it was good. If you decide to write more let me know!

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .

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#4248253

Review of The Steampunk Boiler Room

Review by Piratess Dawniebelle

Rated: E

| (5.0)

I'm loving this group! It's alive with ideas and help! Thank you for adding me.

Serenity to you and yours!
Piratess Dawniebelle

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#4247708

Review of Ghost Hunting

Review by Piratess Dawniebelle

Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

I'm glad I found this story to read!

What I think worked: your incorporation of technology ghost hunting app in the story. I love that you used something that is used in real life. This brings a lot of creditation to your story. Also I love that you have SIX as an answer and then RUN. Your description 'My adrenaline begins filling...' Is a great way to put the reader in your characters shoes.

What you could improve: the ending. I got confused at the end when you start talking about the phone calls and such. A little elaboration here might go a long way.

All in all great story!

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .

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#4247706

Review of A New Sky - Revised

Review by Piratess Dawniebelle

Rated: E

| (5.0)

This really shows off your writing style! I love how you have very little clues as to the ending! I love that twist at the end as well. Going back over the story I understand more than I did the first time. It was a little confusing at first but if you push on to the end everything becomes clear! I really enjoy your style here! I didn't see any real errors that you could improve on either! Great job and keep writing.

Serenity to you and yours!
Piratess Dawniebelle