i felt a strong connection to my school days with the rain and wet books, and i could understand the way and why she felt drawn to the cemetery, the last part sucked me right in i find myself wanting to know what happened next. it got me excited for this girl who was about to have what seems to me an adventure worth having. I felt it was totally believable and it flowed well. i thought maybe you could expand on the markers, and describe the tombstones or plaques more. but aside from that i really liked it.
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