This made me laugh. I know this wasn't what you expected but the dark prospect is original. I loved the memory of a bluebird because usually evil people go after kittens and puppy dogs. I didn't expect you to use the bluebirds in this way. There could be more to the plot I think though this is simply my opinion.
This story gave me the shivers. It's short, sweet and to the point which is how short stories should be. This only adds to the perfection of this story since it is scary within the short story. The plot interested me, which is rare with historical type stories. The characters are very believable though you could easily extend Della's story. The time, place and characteristics of the Della and Sam worked perfectly together since slaves were used for that. I liked your description, "Her body went from pale and cold to appearing as if it had been in the grave for a month. The skin melted away. Her eyes, nose and mouth were now open sockets where insects crawled". The part I liked least though was the rhyme at the end. I liked the thought of a rhyme completeing the story but maybe it should be something...more.
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